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WHAT DO YOU THINK?
WHAT DO YOU THINK?
I feel l am so clean; l have no dirt
to make me troubled with my soul and flesh.
How disturbed man will be when some filth sticks
to his clean heart and mars the tune it beats.
He sits to write; he does not seem all right
as he feels that his heart conveys its dirt
to all his senses through his dirty veins
to make him feel the dirt and hate its smell .
How great is that pure Man of thirty three;
He rinses out the dirt with His chaste blood.
He makes his heart as clean as angels are
and renders him quite fit to use his quill.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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I feel l am so clean; l have no dirt
to make me troubled with my soul and flesh.
How disturbed man will be when some filth sticks
to his clean heart and mars the tune it beats.
He sits to write; he does not seem all right
as he feels that his heart conveys its dirt
to all his senses through his dirty veins
to make him feel the dirt and hate its smell .
How great is that pure Man of thirty three;
He rinses out the dirt with His chaste blood.
He makes his heart as clean as angels are
and renders him quite fit to use his quill.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
Published 1st Oct 2020
| Edited 2nd Oct 2020
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1st Oct 2020 9:59pm
I never knew
that Jesus had desires to take
a quill in hand, let alone
to set his words upon a page or two
in poetry.
In fact, the Kaine Diatheke says
he never wrote
or felt the urge to write a thing at all
except some non-remembered sentences
he scratched out with
his finger on
a small patch of Judean sand.
It also never says
that Jesus cleaned his ventricals
of dirt.
Besides that, is it really true
that those with unclean hearts
have always been unable to
produce a slew of poetry
that stood (and stands!)
as worthy of regard?
The answer’s no
as you yourself have testified,
unless you want to claim
the poets that you’ve praised
as masters of poetic art
had hearts that at the time they wrote
were then as clean
as what you say
the God made messengers
from heaven are.
But then you'd contradict yourself
once more.
Before you protest that you are speaking of what Jesus does for poets who have unclean hearts by pouring out his blood when he died, you need to realize that there's no evidence that poets who were sinners did not write anything of consequence until they accepted Jesus as their savior and plenty of evidence that poets who remained sinners had no problem producing stellar poetry, that there were good poets who lived long before Jesus died, and more importantly, that given your syntax, the antecedent of the pronouns used in your last two lines is Jesus.
that Jesus had desires to take
a quill in hand, let alone
to set his words upon a page or two
in poetry.
In fact, the Kaine Diatheke says
he never wrote
or felt the urge to write a thing at all
except some non-remembered sentences
he scratched out with
his finger on
a small patch of Judean sand.
It also never says
that Jesus cleaned his ventricals
of dirt.
Besides that, is it really true
that those with unclean hearts
have always been unable to
produce a slew of poetry
that stood (and stands!)
as worthy of regard?
The answer’s no
as you yourself have testified,
unless you want to claim
the poets that you’ve praised
as masters of poetic art
had hearts that at the time they wrote
were then as clean
as what you say
the God made messengers
from heaven are.
But then you'd contradict yourself
once more.
Before you protest that you are speaking of what Jesus does for poets who have unclean hearts by pouring out his blood when he died, you need to realize that there's no evidence that poets who were sinners did not write anything of consequence until they accepted Jesus as their savior and plenty of evidence that poets who remained sinners had no problem producing stellar poetry, that there were good poets who lived long before Jesus died, and more importantly, that given your syntax, the antecedent of the pronouns used in your last two lines is Jesus.
2nd Oct 2020 5:13pm
You've done it again -- given a text a title that bears no relationship to it. Moreover, the title is hardly complete since you don't say what it is that a reader is being asked to think about. And if it is what anyone thinks about the idea that Jesus' blood somehow manages to enable a "dirt tainted" poet to break through his/her writer's block, then the answer is "I think it's nonsense", For instance, Shelly, a fornicator, never accepted Jesus as his savior ( a condition that many Christians believe was the way someone gets "washed" in Jesus' blood and purified of sin) and remained an atheist throughout his life.
