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my job
incense make dust
label my fingertips
the music south and drums
dancing in the fire
plastic covers the
lp cd
floating in the air
ep
solid forms and together
together brought a form
art that holds the soul
possession and liquid
starving
thirst
bring me to see
those other things that
those people see
label my fingertips
the music south and drums
dancing in the fire
plastic covers the
lp cd
floating in the air
ep
solid forms and together
together brought a form
art that holds the soul
possession and liquid
starving
thirst
bring me to see
those other things that
those people see
Published 27th Jan 2012
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6th Feb 2012 7:53am
Good job Adele,
a little confusing at first without the periods.
on the last few lines there i would probably change the first those into 'the' or 'all the' or some variation.
still good to see you evolving.
nice one, shine on!
a little confusing at first without the periods.
on the last few lines there i would probably change the first those into 'the' or 'all the' or some variation.
still good to see you evolving.
nice one, shine on!
