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My tears are dried on rags of pity
Dystopia behold its towering halls
I stumble barefoot sometimes crawl
the plague abroad in town and city
my tears are dried on rags of pity
Bare streets where ghostly footsteps echo
just boarded shops the new Art Deco
sidewalks, married to takeaway confetti
my tear are dried on rags of pity
Frailty of acceptance just a broken crystal palace
and mental anguish bears no malice
the slope so steep the way so slippery
my tears are dried on rags of pity
A swathe of fear, the scythe cuts toll
for all those remembered on that scroll
it's not signed off, left wall to wall graffiti
my tears are dried on rags of pity
I stumble barefoot sometimes crawl
the plague abroad in town and city
my tears are dried on rags of pity
Bare streets where ghostly footsteps echo
just boarded shops the new Art Deco
sidewalks, married to takeaway confetti
my tear are dried on rags of pity
Frailty of acceptance just a broken crystal palace
and mental anguish bears no malice
the slope so steep the way so slippery
my tears are dried on rags of pity
A swathe of fear, the scythe cuts toll
for all those remembered on that scroll
it's not signed off, left wall to wall graffiti
my tears are dried on rags of pity
Published 19th Aug 2020
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19th Aug 2020 2:25pm
it not signed off . left wall to wall graffiti
my tears are dried on rags of pity
Slip the last two lines need a bit of work. Did you mean *if* not signed off? Also, there is a period in the middle of the phrase. Did you mean that? Or a comma? If the former, then Left should be capped.
Overall it's a very solid poem in regards to the vandalization of memorials ( or so I took it as such ). They rhyme seems to flow unforced, though I think you could tighten up a few lines with excess syllables.
my tears are dried on rags of pity
Slip the last two lines need a bit of work. Did you mean *if* not signed off? Also, there is a period in the middle of the phrase. Did you mean that? Or a comma? If the former, then Left should be capped.
Overall it's a very solid poem in regards to the vandalization of memorials ( or so I took it as such ). They rhyme seems to flow unforced, though I think you could tighten up a few lines with excess syllables.
19th Aug 2020 2:43pm
thanks changed it to it`s ( the virus continues ) not signed off.
A slight change in style with the repeating last line : just exprerimenting I like to try various styles
A slight change in style with the repeating last line : just exprerimenting I like to try various styles
