Soul Love

structured :),
And well written with meaning :)

Hi There

Your piece is very passionate and immediate, perfectly capturing the pain of desire and desperation.  Just one little thing: I feel you need to cut down the use of the word 'love'; it's a very powerful word and it is weaken slighly by its over-use here.

Just a suggestion, but a good piece overall.

thank you and i agree with you :)

i can totally understand and sympathize with your words.. simply put.. true to the heart (and body).. good job hun

Theres no grammar, how do I know when to slow down or stop. This is your work. only you know how it should be read. What about the reader's.. I can't dig it.  

well.. as u said its my work.. i know what it says. i write for me and others can read if the want..

It reads fine...punctuation in poetry is a very finely used tool, and the reader has plenty of clues here without it... One think I hate? to, over:punc!tu"ate; :-)

haha thanks :)

Oh I know this. Nice!