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I'll sing a song for you
that is what I'm supposed
to do: while I ride the
shower-shampood smell of
your thick curly straight
hair, hanging heavier, warmer
than I am bare: you cast
under the heavens tides of
Lake Michigan flowering full,
just to see me, as calm as
jungle flowers: your car
parked in a No Parking Zone:
crying like a flower in the sun.
that is what I'm supposed
to do: while I ride the
shower-shampood smell of
your thick curly straight
hair, hanging heavier, warmer
than I am bare: you cast
under the heavens tides of
Lake Michigan flowering full,
just to see me, as calm as
jungle flowers: your car
parked in a No Parking Zone:
crying like a flower in the sun.
Published 17th Jan 2012
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18th Jan 2012 00:31am
i did enjoy the majority of this piece... multiple use of the term (flower) seems like the inspiration left you before u stopped writing... curly-straight? two descriptions countering themselves. this would work if you made it one term. the double spaced single line format creates a chain effect. I like this!
3rd May 2012 3:15am
Thanks for the comments. "curly-straight" is only there to suggest the complexity of her. Actually when she is in rain or snow her hair is "curly." When she goes to work or when we meet it is usually straight, if this makes any sense.
Marcella1
Marcella1
