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Sweet thing
How does love taste?
I often ruminate...
... years
years have passed by
since I have savoured
its flavour
aahh, it tastes... sweet
(too saccharine for me to remember)
that flavour lingered...danced upon
my taste buds
... for sometime
before I decided to brush away
the debris
...left by him
I flossed
scraped
scrubbed
away the remnant
every bit of it...
(with all my might)
The residue
of his so called love
would had bred germs of
pain and hurt
creating a deep cavity
of emptiness
digging it's root
into my soul...
eating up
the very essence
of me
I've heard
cavity is dreadful
... a hellish pit
where love and worth of
oneself
takes a plunge
get stuck
to its core
and
rot
...rot
rot
until
a despicable stench of
self hatred, guilt
and suicidal thoughts
stale the air;
the infections cause
soul decay
tokens of betrayal
—a dreadful shooting pain
up the heart
an exploding brain
and a sharp, piercing
sensitivity
...to sweet things
glad I rinsed away his taste
but my tears precious
didn't go to waste
the saltiness finally subdued
the sweetness
I no longer have sweet tooth
I gave up for good
I have no desire
for
sweet things...
I often ruminate...
... years
years have passed by
since I have savoured
its flavour
aahh, it tastes... sweet
(too saccharine for me to remember)
that flavour lingered...danced upon
my taste buds
... for sometime
before I decided to brush away
the debris
...left by him
I flossed
scraped
scrubbed
away the remnant
every bit of it...
(with all my might)
The residue
of his so called love
would had bred germs of
pain and hurt
creating a deep cavity
of emptiness
digging it's root
into my soul...
eating up
the very essence
of me
I've heard
cavity is dreadful
... a hellish pit
where love and worth of
oneself
takes a plunge
get stuck
to its core
and
rot
...rot
rot
until
a despicable stench of
self hatred, guilt
and suicidal thoughts
stale the air;
the infections cause
soul decay
tokens of betrayal
—a dreadful shooting pain
up the heart
an exploding brain
and a sharp, piercing
sensitivity
...to sweet things
glad I rinsed away his taste
but my tears precious
didn't go to waste
the saltiness finally subdued
the sweetness
I no longer have sweet tooth
I gave up for good
I have no desire
for
sweet things...
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Re. Sweet thing
5th Jun 2020 12:17pm
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5th Jun 2020 12:21pm
Thank you so much, dearest one. Your love and support is deeply felt and appreciated... Thanks much 🌹❤️
Re. Sweet thing
5th Jun 2020 1:06pm
So heartbreaking. Love is a great thing to have. hopefully theres more you can hang onto.
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5th Jun 2020 1:46pm
Yes, indeed it is... But the pain of betrayal or unrequited love is too excruciating to bear...
Thanks a lot, dear DC for your thoughtful comments and the RL add.
Thanks a lot, dear DC for your thoughtful comments and the RL add.
Re. Sweet thing
5th Jun 2020 4:09pm
On my this is absolutely exquisite of a metaphor. The writing is astonishingly beautiful. And it is so rich with emotion that my heart literally increased in ache with each stanza. This is the epitome of greatness. And i resonate strongly. Thank you for putting into words I still have not been able to.
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5th Jun 2020 7:02pm
I'm over the moon by your wonderful feedback. Thanks a lot for bestowing on my spill such fantastic adjectives of praise.
I'm so overwhelmed by this great response, pretty poetess. Thanks muchly 😊🌷
I'm so overwhelmed by this great response, pretty poetess. Thanks muchly 😊🌷
Re: Re. Sweet thing
5th Jun 2020 8:43pm
It was well earned. And your words healed a fragment of my own brokenness, so I am grateful to you for that. And beyond that, the beauty of this piece is worthy of praise in and of itself.
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5th Jun 2020 8:56pm
It makes me so happy to know that this piece could touch you in a positive way.
Thank you once again for supporting this spill... 😊❤️
Thank you once again for supporting this spill... 😊❤️
Re. Sweet thing
5th Jun 2020 5:42pm
This is a gut wrenching spill. The poignancy and the bittersweet taste of love and break up is well described. 🌹❤
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5th Jun 2020 7:11pm
Why, thank you, dear poetess. 😊
Great to have your presence on my page. Thanks for the comment and the RL add. I'm honoured.
Great to have your presence on my page. Thanks for the comment and the RL add. I'm honoured.
Re. Sweet thing
6th Jun 2020 6:00am
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6th Jun 2020 7:31am
Re. Sweet thing
8th Jun 2020 8:11am
That was such an incredibly powerful poem... your emotions here hit hard like a ton of bricks. This is so very well-expressed and beautifully worded. You did a fantastic job... and I can really feel the despair. I'm sorry you had to go through that, but I am grateful to be able to see the phoenix rise from the ashes ;)
Keep up the great writing, InDreamz!! <3
Keep up the great writing, InDreamz!! <3
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9th Jun 2020 1:50pm
Dear Newbeginnings,
Thank you so much for providing me with such encouragement and motivation through your amazing feedbacks. Your words leave me flattered and floored.
Thanks a bunch, dear friend. 🌷
Thank you so much for providing me with such encouragement and motivation through your amazing feedbacks. Your words leave me flattered and floored.
Thanks a bunch, dear friend. 🌷
Re. Sweet thing
9th Jun 2020 3:46am
I truly feel this although I'm more ashamed to say it was lust and not love when I wasn't loved right.
"I no longer have sweet tooth
I gave up for good
I have no desire
for
sweet things... "
Sigh, so bittersweet the tiny void that can't be denied though. So sorry for your loss as it was actually love; what should have been reciprocated. I totally get that too; exactly how I found myself in the pits of lust as you may see in older writings. My case of lust at least instilled the passion to write and is the only reason I'm here doing it today. Always look for the silver lining, I say! ❤💫
"I no longer have sweet tooth
I gave up for good
I have no desire
for
sweet things... "
Sigh, so bittersweet the tiny void that can't be denied though. So sorry for your loss as it was actually love; what should have been reciprocated. I totally get that too; exactly how I found myself in the pits of lust as you may see in older writings. My case of lust at least instilled the passion to write and is the only reason I'm here doing it today. Always look for the silver lining, I say! ❤💫
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9th Jun 2020 9:51am
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts n feelings with me dear poetess...
You know... When you love some wholeheartedly that you everything of yourself.... And then that person breaks your trust...cheats on you... And the worst... You finally realize he never loved you...all he did was use you physically, emotionally and financially...he promised you stars and the moon... took you to seventh sky.... The experience was heavenly.... Love tasted sweet.... So sweet.... But it did leave a bitter taste when I was betrayed...
It's not easy to trust others now.... Not Coz of just that one experience but some other experiences too....
You know... When you love some wholeheartedly that you everything of yourself.... And then that person breaks your trust...cheats on you... And the worst... You finally realize he never loved you...all he did was use you physically, emotionally and financially...he promised you stars and the moon... took you to seventh sky.... The experience was heavenly.... Love tasted sweet.... So sweet.... But it did leave a bitter taste when I was betrayed...
It's not easy to trust others now.... Not Coz of just that one experience but some other experiences too....
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Re: Re. Sweet thing
13th Jun 2020 7:35pm
Wow, You made my day, dear poet!
Thank you so much for your kind words and the RL add. Means a lot 😊
Thank you so much for your kind words and the RL add. Means a lot 😊
Re. Sweet thing
7th Jul 2020 9:59pm
While heartbreaking, there is also a confidence and determination here. There is no reason to “look back” because your protagonist is looking ahead. The saltiness has subdued the sweetness!
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7th Jul 2020 10:02pm
Re. Sweet thing
22nd Jul 2020 1:58pm
The bittersweet taste of love, once so sweet then betrayal or infidelity poison's our once sweet nectar
Lovely piece
Ron xx
Lovely piece
Ron xx
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22nd Jul 2020 2:02pm
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17th Oct 2020 4:42pm
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17th Oct 2020 5:32pm
Wow! That's the biggest compliment I have ever got! You are the first person to tell me that. Thanks a lot for such gracious thought. You are too kind, dear Berke... But I never thought my work is good enough to be published.
But, thanks a lot for saying that. 😊
But, thanks a lot for saying that. 😊
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17th Oct 2020 5:35pm
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17th Oct 2020 6:32pm
Re. Sweet thing
14th Aug 2021 6:58pm
Excellent 👌
I loved this stanza
"The residue
of his so called love
would had bred germs of
pain and hurt
creating a deep cavity
of emptiness
digging it's root
into my soul...
eating up
the very essence
of me "
This one too
"that flavour lingered...danced upon" so creative!!!
I loved this stanza
"The residue
of his so called love
would had bred germs of
pain and hurt
creating a deep cavity
of emptiness
digging it's root
into my soul...
eating up
the very essence
of me "
This one too
"that flavour lingered...danced upon" so creative!!!
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Re: Re. Sweet thing
14th Aug 2021 7:04pm
😊😊😊
Thank you, dear William for your fantastic feedback....this one isn't my regular style of writing.... But I'm happy with this poem
Thank you once again... Very much appreciate you adding this piece to your reading list 😊🌹
Thank you, dear William for your fantastic feedback....this one isn't my regular style of writing.... But I'm happy with this poem
Thank you once again... Very much appreciate you adding this piece to your reading list 😊🌹
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14th Aug 2021 7:19pm