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PAIN THROUGH IT'S LOOKING GLASS
This Pain that you hide
the world that is unseen
nothing left but the misery
things you wish could left your side
Yet the darkness in the hearts or many you held close
these feelings vanish like a goast from your past
they never leave your side until the your last breath
time repressed the rest
The Sadness that has been hiden
behind a fake smile a cracked mask
A twisted tought
A fragle mind
The hidden pain behind lifeless eyes
for those who have heard your lise
stering in to a emty void
But This Pain Have a looking glass
this window that has seen your shame
From your enternal past
when you think about it this world is still the same
the world that is unseen
nothing left but the misery
things you wish could left your side
Yet the darkness in the hearts or many you held close
these feelings vanish like a goast from your past
they never leave your side until the your last breath
time repressed the rest
The Sadness that has been hiden
behind a fake smile a cracked mask
A twisted tought
A fragle mind
The hidden pain behind lifeless eyes
for those who have heard your lise
stering in to a emty void
But This Pain Have a looking glass
this window that has seen your shame
From your enternal past
when you think about it this world is still the same
Published 11th Jan 2012
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11th Jan 2012 11:02pm
things you wish could-- wish you could have*
vanish like a goast from your past-- ghost
The Sadnessthat has been hiden --sadness has been hidden; omit that*
A twisted tought - thought*
A fragle mind -- fragile*
heard your lise-- lies*
stering in to a emty void --- an empty* ;do you mean steering or staring? i think you mean staring**
But This Pain Have a looking glass -- has*; is there a specific reason for the caps?
From your enternal past-- eternal*
i like the picture but i dont get the association it has to the poem.
This is ok, neither here nor there. it isnt very clear on what youre trying to portray.. its choppy.
vanish like a goast from your past-- ghost
The Sadnessthat has been hiden --sadness has been hidden; omit that*
A twisted tought - thought*
A fragle mind -- fragile*
heard your lise-- lies*
stering in to a emty void --- an empty* ;do you mean steering or staring? i think you mean staring**
But This Pain Have a looking glass -- has*; is there a specific reason for the caps?
From your enternal past-- eternal*
i like the picture but i dont get the association it has to the poem.
This is ok, neither here nor there. it isnt very clear on what youre trying to portray.. its choppy.
12th Jan 2012 2:03pm
Thanks and I couldn't find the picture right pic on my computer (i'm going to fix that this afternoon)pluse i type to fast _ _ll
12th Jan 2012 5:40pm
