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Ripen Fruit
Inhaling the fragrance of your absence upon my feather pillow
A begotten time of imprinted entanglement
As the trail of your tongue lightly caressed my skin
We laid bare in remembrance of Eden’s paradise
Soft love notes are bodies tenderly played
The sweeten melody of ripen fruit our bodies partook
Heightened pulses interwoven and attuned
My nectar savored in the moistened sap
Losing myself in the feel of your gentle kiss forever staining my lips
Only to be famished for the relish
A begotten time of imprinted entanglement
As the trail of your tongue lightly caressed my skin
We laid bare in remembrance of Eden’s paradise
Soft love notes are bodies tenderly played
The sweeten melody of ripen fruit our bodies partook
Heightened pulses interwoven and attuned
My nectar savored in the moistened sap
Losing myself in the feel of your gentle kiss forever staining my lips
Only to be famished for the relish
Published 8th Apr 2020
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8th Apr 2020 5:18am
8th Apr 2020 5:03pm
Thank you, Tallen (earth_empath) sir, and for providing me with such great feedback
8th Apr 2020 12:33pm
I like reading from the bottom up and I did that for this poem.
This reminded me of The Garden of Eden and The Forbidden Fruit.
It looks like you replaced forbidden with ripen and that subconsciously made me think of the Garden of Eden.
In this poem I realized that in some way Adam was powerless in his inability to resist Eve's seduction.
Beautiful and inspirational for me.
This reminded me of The Garden of Eden and The Forbidden Fruit.
It looks like you replaced forbidden with ripen and that subconsciously made me think of the Garden of Eden.
In this poem I realized that in some way Adam was powerless in his inability to resist Eve's seduction.
Beautiful and inspirational for me.
8th Apr 2020 5:05pm
Thank you, and I just followed your suggestion to read from the bottom up to the top, that is astonishing, sir,
12th Apr 2020 4:09am
Love the poem. I’m a actually writing a poem that may have a little garden of Eden (AC) feel to in a much different way
13th Apr 2020 00:36am
Thank you sir, and please let me know so I may have the pleasure of returning the compliment
13th Apr 2020 1:46am
Thank you, your so very kind. I’m a slow writer so what I am writing may take a while.
13th Apr 2020 1:48am
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22nd May 2020 1:03am
Wow. I gotta say, I pretty much don't enjoy sensual poems, in general. This, however . . . this is beautiful. It says and leaves out just enough. Enticing, but not vulgar. Very well penned! Listed & followed!
9th Jun 2020 4:21am
