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Poetry Is Something That Happens By Accident
the hourglass sputters
the blazar expands when
the Ajna collapses and
the fullmoon passes above
the crown
the ground gives way
the coffe cup tremors along
the faultline
there are few constants in life
personas are a nickel
for every half-dozen
dreams are becoming harder to remember
"wokefullness" is becoming a little blurrier
the blazar expands when
the Ajna collapses and
the fullmoon passes above
the crown
the ground gives way
the coffe cup tremors along
the faultline
there are few constants in life
personas are a nickel
for every half-dozen
dreams are becoming harder to remember
"wokefullness" is becoming a little blurrier
Published 14th Mar 2020
Author's Note
This doesnt feel complete yet. Im totally up for critique and suggestion on this one
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Anonymous
- Edited 14th Mar 2020 11:41am
14th Mar 2020 11:32am
Well, my thought is that, while very intriguing, it's a bit vague like a Nostrodamous prediction.
The title at the moment explains the most; I think the poem should / could display more relevance to it.
The title at the moment explains the most; I think the poem should / could display more relevance to it.
15th Mar 2020 5:22pm
Thanks for the advice. Im going to leave it alone for a day or two and come back to it
Anonymous
15th Mar 2020 5:32pm
Until you have them published, they are never really finished. Take your time.
