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End of the World
Can’t wait till the end of the world
people screaming and flags unfurled
Can’t wait till the end of all life
no more killing with guns or knives
Can’t wait till the sun goes dim
All life on earth again may begin
Can’t wait for humanity to cry
they have destroyed the planet that is why
Now I will watch the world spin to it’s end
Goodbye I may see you again…
people screaming and flags unfurled
Can’t wait till the end of all life
no more killing with guns or knives
Can’t wait till the sun goes dim
All life on earth again may begin
Can’t wait for humanity to cry
they have destroyed the planet that is why
Now I will watch the world spin to it’s end
Goodbye I may see you again…
Published 7th Jan 2012
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3rd Dec 2013 7:17pm
i like it but there are a few things that I wish you weould change. First thing i wish you woyuld change is the line "all life on earth again may begin" i feel it could flow better if you switched again and may. second thing i saw was there were a few lines much longer than the others. That, for me, holds a lack of rythm. also, with the line "cant wait till the sun goes dim" i feel it would sound better if you changed goes to something two sillybal like becomes. also, i dont personally like the use of "till" and i feel it ciould sound better as until. othere than those things i like the poem very much
