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You, My Soul-mate
Can you feel my heart beating
When I hold you tightly against me?
I can feel your warm hands over my body
Leaving my skin warm and lingering
Your love is like a bright flame
I feel you softly breathing on my lips
When you kiss me, everything fades away
Like a sunset over the golden waters
How we whisper to each other without words
Such a treasure kept in my soul
With a lock only to be broken by your voice
Fascinated by your touch and infatuation with me
You leave me breathless
When I hold you tightly against me?
I can feel your warm hands over my body
Leaving my skin warm and lingering
Your love is like a bright flame
I feel you softly breathing on my lips
When you kiss me, everything fades away
Like a sunset over the golden waters
How we whisper to each other without words
Such a treasure kept in my soul
With a lock only to be broken by your voice
Fascinated by your touch and infatuation with me
You leave me breathless
Published 7th Jan 2012
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Anonymous
7th Jan 2012 6:07am
i like your poem everyone has yhere ow n soul mate u should also read my poem i wrote one abot my soulmate
9th Jan 2012 8:52am
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- Edited 9th Jan 2012 10:17am
7th Jan 2012 7:25am
Your piece leaves me breathless.
I love the way it flows effortlessly through it's topic, which could be cliche' had it not been written in such a unique way. Well done.
A sidenote...
Would the rythmn work better if you didn't capitilize the first letter of each line?
Blue Skies Miss Raven
Al -x-
I love the way it flows effortlessly through it's topic, which could be cliche' had it not been written in such a unique way. Well done.
A sidenote...
Would the rythmn work better if you didn't capitilize the first letter of each line?
Blue Skies Miss Raven
Al -x-
9th Jan 2012 8:54am
Hehe thank you!! and thanks for the advice, will edit this poem when i feel like it and not lazy XD :$ :)
7th Jan 2012 3:27pm
I am a very spiritual person and I believe that everyone has a soul mate and you have conveyed the feelings of finding your soul mate beautifully xx
7th Jan 2012 7:50pm
I can really sense your passion for this muse. a lot of infatuation oozing from the words. a couple scentences ended in a tongue twister (Tightly against me)(touch and infatuation with me) etc I'm not big on a lot of punctuation but... it could soften those phrases. really enjoy your style of writing. i can sense a very strong awareness of literary content.
9th Jan 2012 8:57am
.. For the comments :) really aprciate it!! :D and it helps me to see how i can make the poem even better :P :)
