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The View From The Top
rugged and bare moors set against a darkening sky
reddish-brown mills
fat pylons
farms and fields and valleys
Further on lay an austere three storey-house set on a mound, surrounded by statues and water fountains and a landscaped garden that overlooked the steep side hill leading down to river and to the abandoned factories and mills.
Based on a previous novel attempt set in the Lancashire and Yorkshire borders. Genre: Psychological Thriller
reddish-brown mills
fat pylons
farms and fields and valleys
Further on lay an austere three storey-house set on a mound, surrounded by statues and water fountains and a landscaped garden that overlooked the steep side hill leading down to river and to the abandoned factories and mills.
Based on a previous novel attempt set in the Lancashire and Yorkshire borders. Genre: Psychological Thriller
Published 25th Feb 2020
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25th Feb 2020 11:55pm
26th Feb 2020 8:25pm
26th Feb 2020 00:11am
LOVED the spacing between images, Lozzamus; it allows the reader to digest between them. Way to emphasize a mood.
The only issue I had was the run on sentence at the end. I honestly think you could remove some of those conjunctions.
Further on lay an austere three storey-house set on a mound, surrounded by statues, water fountains, and a landscaped garden that overlooked the steep side hill leading down to ( the ) river, abandoned factories, and mills.
The only issue I had was the run on sentence at the end. I honestly think you could remove some of those conjunctions.
Further on lay an austere three storey-house set on a mound, surrounded by statues, water fountains, and a landscaped garden that overlooked the steep side hill leading down to ( the ) river, abandoned factories, and mills.
26th Feb 2020 8:27pm
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