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Linger Here
Linger here, where fingers
touch lightly through crowded
rows, of silver dreams
Exhale, breathe the flavor
of my corkscrew wired mind,
laced bound and
concealed, behind steamy
walls
Bite down on my tight thoughts,
that compel you to burn me,
inside out
Carve an elicit path, through
the underside, of good intention
Rotate, grind my bones to dust,
I love the way I feel, beneath you
weaving yourself through
remnants, of surrender
Sink, your thoughts deeper
so, I will never forget.
touch lightly through crowded
rows, of silver dreams
Exhale, breathe the flavor
of my corkscrew wired mind,
laced bound and
concealed, behind steamy
walls
Bite down on my tight thoughts,
that compel you to burn me,
inside out
Carve an elicit path, through
the underside, of good intention
Rotate, grind my bones to dust,
I love the way I feel, beneath you
weaving yourself through
remnants, of surrender
Sink, your thoughts deeper
so, I will never forget.
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Like like like. Wow....sensual and memorable poem.
I especially loved the last two paragraphs!
I especially loved the last two paragraphs!
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Anonymous
- Edited 7th Sep 2022 7:45pm
23rd Feb 2020 12:44pm
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23rd Feb 2020 3:01pm
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23rd Feb 2020 8:57pm
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23rd Feb 2020 5:55pm
Have you thought of expanding it from a point of view from the female perspective ?
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23rd Feb 2020 8:41pm
I think that was a female perspective and yes I thought of expanding I felt the emotion produced by using the word linger created friction with the brevity of the piece creating tension resulting in the piece lingering in the readers mind
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23rd Feb 2020 8:53pm
Pic inspired this rhyming caption:
'Oh, my dear!
Linger here,
fingers near...'
'Oh, my dear!
Linger here,
fingers near...'
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24th Feb 2020 6:31am
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24th Feb 2020 7:05am
This was intriguing, this was sexy, this is sooooo well written
Nice Job V, I loved it
Thanks for sharing
Nice Job V, I loved it
Thanks for sharing
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24th Feb 2020 10:51am
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24th Feb 2020 12:31pm
sensual and sexy with lingering thoughts capture by the mind and soul...respect poetess
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24th Feb 2020 1:08pm
Thank you so much my friend I find the more sensual a piece is it seems to linger longer it activates the senses deeper they motivate the imagination for a longer period of time whereas the explicit sexy piece gives instant gratification They both serve their purpose to stimulate thought through the written word Thank you
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Anonymous
- Edited 29th Jan 2022 7:45am
3rd Mar 2020 5:38am
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