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Am I to hard on myself and others?
While oters around me seem oblivious and happy
I am inwardly sad but smiling to thiose around me
Thouh I have thoughts of dobt and fear
Of my ability to persevere
To get through the day
Without calling someone an idiot
Or a moron
I cant understand why they don't see the way I do
As I am usually right and know the way things should go
But people won't listen to experience
They have to find out for themselves
Which leaves me shaking my head, frustrated
Maybe I'm wrong
But going with the flow does not work for me
I have my own path and only want to help those that are drowning in their own sea of stupidity
I am inwardly sad but smiling to thiose around me
Thouh I have thoughts of dobt and fear
Of my ability to persevere
To get through the day
Without calling someone an idiot
Or a moron
I cant understand why they don't see the way I do
As I am usually right and know the way things should go
But people won't listen to experience
They have to find out for themselves
Which leaves me shaking my head, frustrated
Maybe I'm wrong
But going with the flow does not work for me
I have my own path and only want to help those that are drowning in their own sea of stupidity
Published 13th Jan 2020
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13th Jan 2020 12:08pm
This was good, but it has a lot of typos. I corrected them for you:
"Am I too hard on myself and others?
While others around me seem oblivious and happy,
I am inwardly sad, but smiling to those around me.
Though I have thoughts of doubt and fear,
Of my ability to persevere...
To get through the day
Without calling someone an idiot,
Or a moron.
I can't understand why they don't see the way I do,
As I am usually right, and know the way things should go.
But people won't listen to experience...
They have to find out for themselves.
Which leaves me shaking my head, frustrated.
Maybe I'm wrong,
But going with the flow does not work for me.
I have my own path...
I only want to help those that are drowning in their own sea of stupidity."
"Am I too hard on myself and others?
While others around me seem oblivious and happy,
I am inwardly sad, but smiling to those around me.
Though I have thoughts of doubt and fear,
Of my ability to persevere...
To get through the day
Without calling someone an idiot,
Or a moron.
I can't understand why they don't see the way I do,
As I am usually right, and know the way things should go.
But people won't listen to experience...
They have to find out for themselves.
Which leaves me shaking my head, frustrated.
Maybe I'm wrong,
But going with the flow does not work for me.
I have my own path...
I only want to help those that are drowning in their own sea of stupidity."
13th Jan 2020 10:09pm
Thanks. I’m using an iPad and typing too fast. Don’t know how they got through spell check.
13th Jan 2020 12:09pm
Anyway, welcome to DUP! Thanks for sharing that with us, and I hope you like it here!
Anonymous
20th Jan 2020 2:10am
Without examples of what the others do, the narrator's questions and thus the poem lose any urgency on the readers' behalf to be concerned. Throw something in is my suggestion.
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