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Cold and Alone
My meals,
Should they appease my hunger,
Taste lonely for some reason.
I look in the mirror each dull morning
To see my eyes glazed with fog
And my skin faded
With the frigid winter season.
I feel cold
When i sit here alone
Hearing slight taps on my window
Hypothermia
Begging me to let the breeze in
I fade away and listen to my breath,
My sighing lungs
Slowly breaking into tiny, glass pieces.
Should they appease my hunger,
Taste lonely for some reason.
I look in the mirror each dull morning
To see my eyes glazed with fog
And my skin faded
With the frigid winter season.
I feel cold
When i sit here alone
Hearing slight taps on my window
Hypothermia
Begging me to let the breeze in
I fade away and listen to my breath,
My sighing lungs
Slowly breaking into tiny, glass pieces.
Published 21st Dec 2019
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21st Dec 2019 7:04pm
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29th Jan 2020 1:18am
3rd Jan 2020 4:01am
This is incredibly moving and sad. In so few words you capture such great emotion... excellent writing.
29th Jan 2020 1:19am
thank you..
ive been feeling a bit under the weather
so i hope this poem really speaks to someone
ive been feeling a bit under the weather
so i hope this poem really speaks to someone
29th Jan 2020 2:15am
9th Feb 2020 3:19am
I dig it, great winter feel. again I'm enjoying that first stanza coming out of the gate
"My meals,
Should they appease my hunger,
Taste lonely for some reason" - it holds a certain intrigue. well penned.
my only critique after reading 4+ of your poems is give line breaks so it's easier on the eyes to read, I personally find it helps me sharpen my pieces and polish my edges a bit better. overall great writes, keep'em coming.
"My meals,
Should they appease my hunger,
Taste lonely for some reason" - it holds a certain intrigue. well penned.
my only critique after reading 4+ of your poems is give line breaks so it's easier on the eyes to read, I personally find it helps me sharpen my pieces and polish my edges a bit better. overall great writes, keep'em coming.
9th Feb 2020 5:52am
thank you for the advice!
ill try harder to make them easier
to read.
much love
-Deva
ill try harder to make them easier
to read.
much love
-Deva
10th Mar 2020 10:10am
For every low moment there comes a high. Hope your high comes soon. Deep and well written.
16th Mar 2020 10:11pm
