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These Dark Clouds, Colored Luna Grey
silky words
seep slowly
into
my crowded head,
each one
pulling
vibrant colors
from
the atmosphere
~and they sing~
images flutter,
landing softly
across
these dark clouds,
colored luna grey
with the melancholy
of existing
in skin
that doesn’t fit;
each stolen
from memory,
or
my insatiable
imagination,
it’s hard to tell
sometimes
~they all sing~
rotund bass notes
sliding
skin to skin
against
the upwards lilt
that finishes
your voice
like a fine wine
paired perfectly,
and my ears
are an empty glass,
waiting
seep slowly
into
my crowded head,
each one
pulling
vibrant colors
from
the atmosphere
~and they sing~
images flutter,
landing softly
across
these dark clouds,
colored luna grey
with the melancholy
of existing
in skin
that doesn’t fit;
each stolen
from memory,
or
my insatiable
imagination,
it’s hard to tell
sometimes
~they all sing~
rotund bass notes
sliding
skin to skin
against
the upwards lilt
that finishes
your voice
like a fine wine
paired perfectly,
and my ears
are an empty glass,
waiting
Published 13th Dec 2019
Author's Note
Written for The Who Do You Think You Are competition.
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13th Dec 2019 6:10pm
Love the personalization, the signature, of luna grey. Perfect choice for the title. Closing stanza is fascinating, to describe sound in such a way. Opening stanza seems an introduction to the mind of the artist, in particular, your experience of synesthesia. Nice use of anchoring refrain, each strikes like a revelation. You have a beautiful poetic voice Luna.
16th Dec 2019 2:09pm
13th Dec 2019 9:44pm
Everything about it reads of you.
And the ending alone is enough to pour anyone's heart into the glass.
Swirling.
And the ending alone is enough to pour anyone's heart into the glass.
Swirling.
16th Dec 2019 2:10pm
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16th Dec 2019 2:11pm
BB, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment; it’s so very appreciated 💜.
16th Dec 2019 1:07am
16th Dec 2019 2:12pm
17th Dec 2019 6:24pm
Dear L,
I love all of it! I have to confess a favorite though and it’s mostly because I have the brain of a four year old “ rotund bass notes“. I love this line. I pictured pudgy little eighth notes dancing around teasing all the other notes. I know! Completely off topic but it is such fantastic imagery I was transported!
Despite my silliness you are most assuredly heard and loved for all the light and kindness you bring out behind your poems! H🌷
I love all of it! I have to confess a favorite though and it’s mostly because I have the brain of a four year old “ rotund bass notes“. I love this line. I pictured pudgy little eighth notes dancing around teasing all the other notes. I know! Completely off topic but it is such fantastic imagery I was transported!
Despite my silliness you are most assuredly heard and loved for all the light and kindness you bring out behind your poems! H🌷
18th Dec 2019 6:12am
I love the way those words drew an image for you as well. That’s the beauty of poetry, to me: the ability to paint a picture and know that it will draw images for those who view it. Thank you so much, Honoria 💜💜
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