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Watching
Sunlight
streams thru
the linen
curtains
of an old
Italian
villa
Specks of
dust float
slowly
downwards
in the heavy
warmth of
the air and
light
The wooden
floor waits
to catch
them and
hear the
story of
their lives
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Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 2:32am
The stories of out lives.
Let the fall be worthwhile.
(:
I loved this.
Losty
Let the fall be worthwhile.
(:
I loved this.
Losty
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Re: Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 3:02am
Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 5:20am
there's an almost hypnotic, heavy-peaceful vibe to this that is irresistible.
Specks of
dusts float ..... dust?
slowly
downwards
in the heavy
warmth of
the air and
light
in heavy
warmth
of air
light
?maybe
Specks of
dusts float ..... dust?
slowly
downwards
in the heavy
warmth of
the air and
light
in heavy
warmth
of air
light
?maybe
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Re: Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 1:52pm
Thanks for the catch on dusts (silly brain). I think i need the conjunction of "and "though. Its just the way i hear it. I can seldom get past those connectors (silly brain).
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Re: Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 3:50pm
nuthin' silly about it... i'm the same with some of mine; most often it's americans hear brit english differently to how i do; inflections are placed on different parts of words and that changes the nuance/rhythm of a line.
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Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 12:40pm
Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 1:45pm
Or of any age really. The imagination is the only limit. Good to hear from you Josh.
hugs ,
buddhakitty.
hugs ,
buddhakitty.
Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 2:33pm
LOVE THE FLOW OF YOUR WORDS AS IT BRINGS LIFE TO THE TRUE DEPTH OF ONES SOUL...NICELY COMPOSED
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Re: Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 2:56pm
Re: Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 5:49pm
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Re: Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 6:17pm
Thank you,. Appreciate the insights. I have small thoughts so short lines follow lol.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. Watching
19th Oct 2019 8:33pm