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the distance
the distance between
my head and my ass
is how long it takes a
dream to die
love is twenty two
at the blackjack
table
while Caine slams
down shots of
tequila and clubs
his brother into
submission...
the bartender
laughs and pours
another round
Published 18th Oct 2019
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18th Oct 2019 9:48pm
just ... wow! this one packs more than one punch. it's pared back, no fat (imo) and dances on swift feet as it delivers those smacks.
18th Oct 2019 9:58pm
18th Oct 2019 10:16pm
This is such a raw image, the brevity is well crafted and gets over the point perfectly. I like the title too
18th Oct 2019 11:44pm
Thank you for your thoughts and kind words. Every now and then i get it right.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
18th Oct 2019 10:32pm
Woah nice!! I liked and enjoyed the Cain and Abel brother bully reference. But don't let your dreams die as in losing hope even if writing it sounds so poetic. Kudos!
Pls pleez do comment/ write down your thoughts about and under my newest poem too. Without such thought exchange interaction we would be in monologue merely.
Pls pleez do comment/ write down your thoughts about and under my newest poem too. Without such thought exchange interaction we would be in monologue merely.
18th Oct 2019 11:50pm
Thank you. I will absolutely comment on your work when i come across it. We are here to lend support to each other.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
18th Oct 2019 10:53pm
Dreams are slippery things, especially when they fall through ( and apparently out ) of us! LOL!
It's difficult when we think others don't care about issues. I lose my breath when I see someone toss out litter, or a straw into the lake. You would think they live under a rock. And the world turns.
It's difficult when we think others don't care about issues. I lose my breath when I see someone toss out litter, or a straw into the lake. You would think they live under a rock. And the world turns.
18th Oct 2019 11:42pm
Live under a rock? We should be so lucky to have people live under a rock. A large majority of people dont live at all (just the way i see it...but of course I'm highly jaded). Thanks for the words Ahvanti. Always good to hear from you
biggest hugs,
buddhakitty.
biggest hugs,
buddhakitty.
19th Oct 2019 3:58am
Dear BK,
“the distance between
my head and my ass
is how long it takes a
dream to die ” is my favorite stanza of all time! I want this on a t-shirt. Fan-f*cking-tastic! H🌷
“the distance between
my head and my ass
is how long it takes a
dream to die ” is my favorite stanza of all time! I want this on a t-shirt. Fan-f*cking-tastic! H🌷
19th Oct 2019 4:34am
Wow! Thank you Honoria. High praise indeed. I am honored.
100 best furry hugs,
buddhakitty.
100 best furry hugs,
buddhakitty.
