deepundergroundpoetry.com
the rose lives but to bloom and die
Do not watch the petals fall from the rose with sadness; know that, like life,
things sometimes must fade before they can bloom again.—Anonymous
..i..
the rose and i a common life
so fragile and so swift
beneath death’s sacrificial knife
each breath a fleeting gift
..ii..
the earth that strangulates our feet
but gives us strength to grow
as from the shadows of defeat
our life force dares to flow
..iii..
a crown of thorns our slight defense
against vile predators
who dog our paths with violence
our passions to devour
..iv..
and yet we bloom victorious
one bright and happy morn
before our end inglorious
belies that we’d been born
..v..
the rose lives but to bloom and die
to brighten someone’s heart
my brief sojourn to heal their cry
and peace to men impart
© Copyright 2019 October 12
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
things sometimes must fade before they can bloom again.—Anonymous
..i..
the rose and i a common life
so fragile and so swift
beneath death’s sacrificial knife
each breath a fleeting gift
..ii..
the earth that strangulates our feet
but gives us strength to grow
as from the shadows of defeat
our life force dares to flow
..iii..
a crown of thorns our slight defense
against vile predators
who dog our paths with violence
our passions to devour
..iv..
and yet we bloom victorious
one bright and happy morn
before our end inglorious
belies that we’d been born
..v..
the rose lives but to bloom and die
to brighten someone’s heart
my brief sojourn to heal their cry
and peace to men impart
© Copyright 2019 October 12
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
Published 13th Oct 2019
| Edited 28th Oct 2019
Author's Note
View visual (copy/paste):
http://mydo.cx/NGY0NDI3
http://mydo.cx/NGY0NDI3
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 4
reading list entries 0
comments 6
reads 520
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
13th Oct 2019 8:15am
13th Oct 2019 3:43pm
Thank you, WM.
Great of you to stop by, moreover to have something to say and to say it encouragingly.
Sincerely
cab
Great of you to stop by, moreover to have something to say and to say it encouragingly.
Sincerely
cab
13th Oct 2019 1:06pm
A wonderful post, Cabcool. It's filled with wisdom and truth. Two things about the following verse:
the earth that strangulates our feet
gives us [the] strength to grow
as from the shadows of defeat
our life force dares to flow
1. I don't feel you need 'the' in L2
2. It's a solid truth that despite how others attempt to destroy our efforts, it will be impossible if we just keep moving forward. No one can prevent an individuals destiny - not even themselves.
the earth that strangulates our feet
gives us [the] strength to grow
as from the shadows of defeat
our life force dares to flow
1. I don't feel you need 'the' in L2
2. It's a solid truth that despite how others attempt to destroy our efforts, it will be impossible if we just keep moving forward. No one can prevent an individuals destiny - not even themselves.
Thanks, Ahavati, for taking the time to go beyond acclamations to leave constructive criticism on my short-lived rose bloom.
I respectively hear you on both counts.
1. That 'the' was a necessary filer to preserve the established rhythmic/syllabic count per line. I agree that the line would be stronger without it; thanks for making me think about it. I've decided to treat the line thus:
but gives us strength to grow
2. I believe our destiny is our choice, to the extent that the nature of our choices determines the outcome of our destiny. The prophet Joshua put it decisively when he told his people,
"...choose ye this day whom ye will serve....but as for me and my house, we will serve the LORD.” (Josh.24:15 KJV)
Sincerely
cab
I respectively hear you on both counts.
1. That 'the' was a necessary filer to preserve the established rhythmic/syllabic count per line. I agree that the line would be stronger without it; thanks for making me think about it. I've decided to treat the line thus:
but gives us strength to grow
2. I believe our destiny is our choice, to the extent that the nature of our choices determines the outcome of our destiny. The prophet Joshua put it decisively when he told his people,
"...choose ye this day whom ye will serve....but as for me and my house, we will serve the LORD.” (Josh.24:15 KJV)
Sincerely
cab
Anonymous
15th Oct 2019 1:54am
Whoa Cab.......beautifully written........amazing view on life.......you’re such a never ending talent........enjoyed......RL for me......purple luv & hugs xo :)
17th Oct 2019 3:47pm
Thank you, flower, always so encouraging.
I believe I have a special affinity with the rose; I've written quite a few poems on that theme and yet the idea does not seem to tire of me.
I appreciate the RL promise!
Sincerely
cab
I believe I have a special affinity with the rose; I've written quite a few poems on that theme and yet the idea does not seem to tire of me.
I appreciate the RL promise!
Sincerely
cab
