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Liam
( a Rensaku = linked Tanka )
I was in the dark
when I got the news my friend
no lights were left on—
the last of the summer heat
was turning me into ash
▫️
as my blistered thoughts
try to make sense of it all—
am I still breathing
why am I and you are not,
your queens-in-training weep
▫️
we talked on that day,
you told me you’d be leaving
you were unhappy
trying to be a writer
as good as me you had said
▫️
I offered to help,
I knew you’d been struggling
and said please don’t go,
but it never dawned on me
as you politely listened
▫️
I was in the dark
when I got the news my friend
no lights were left on—
the last of the summer heat
was turning me into ash
▫️
as my blistered thoughts
try to make sense of it all—
am I still breathing
why am I and you are not,
your queens-in-training weep
▫️
we talked on that day,
you told me you’d be leaving
you were unhappy
trying to be a writer
as good as me you had said
▫️
I offered to help,
I knew you’d been struggling
and said please don’t go,
but it never dawned on me
as you politely listened
▫️
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