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SENRYU - Matinée de Trois
To gaze on your eyes
bask in your radiant smile
simple ecstasy
Your message received
bonding words encourage growth
nascent crystal spring
Solo flight embarks
stiff stick tween fingers and palm
hand plays poor proxy
bask in your radiant smile
simple ecstasy
Your message received
bonding words encourage growth
nascent crystal spring
Solo flight embarks
stiff stick tween fingers and palm
hand plays poor proxy
Published 15th Sep 2019
| Edited 18th Sep 2019
Author's Note
Characters in this poem portrayed are pure fiction...okay, loosely based on actual, too often reoccurring, events.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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16th Sep 2019 2:51am
Hey, I'm going to steal "nascent crystal spring"...that is a perfect...
Oh, that last sensyru..sighs & hugs you☹...carefully though, with that stiff stick..or said fictional character(s).. giggles with humorous understanding.
Oh, that last sensyru..sighs & hugs you☹...carefully though, with that stiff stick..or said fictional character(s).. giggles with humorous understanding.
17th Sep 2019 5:25am
Thank you do much Pandora! I'm glad you like the piece...and especially the "nascent crystal spring" passage.
16th Sep 2019 6:03am
With so few words you remind us that the act of intercourse isn’t the same as making love.
17th Sep 2019 5:29am
Thank you very much, JazzManor! I appreciate the insight you have into my erotic motive to accentuate the beauty of love making.
17th Sep 2019 5:24am
I love the soft wit to this, and it's sensuality ... and the inevitable sad fulfillment of the last line.
17th Sep 2019 5:36am
Thank you Don Lobo! I am honored that you recognize the nuance in the piece.
17th Sep 2019 8:57am
17th Sep 2019 10:08am
Lovely comment. J do wear toe shoes when I write 😁 But seriously, the "balletic flow" is a beautiful descriptor.
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17th Sep 2019 12:09pm
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17th Sep 2019 7:05pm
Thank you Hrshykss! That you find it sensual is a true compliment from an erotic goddess.
18th Sep 2019 10:25am
Really enjoy the structure of this ... its crispness and flow ... bravo my poet ...
18th Sep 2019 10:34am
Thank you so much Soledad! Your work is the epitome of flow. I am pleased that you enjoyed this piece.
24th Sep 2019 2:56pm
oh God, you and me both. I've actually scheduled it like a tea break during the day
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