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Juxtaposition II
I
Like the light'ning in crazed velocity,
The dame, swathed in fury, charged at him.
Humiliating his giant courage,
As his soles had the loyal earth betrayed.
Charged she continuously at the baffled,
Veiled to him: the stir of the race battle.
II
Under a cedar tree at noon he sat,
Reminiscing, " What have I done to prompt that? "
Then saw he an aloof folk passing by:
Like the torpedo ignores ships that ply.
Turned on by jealousy, he pursued it.
("Gutsy!") Till he caught up and possessed it.
Thus is money: run from who run to it.
In jealousy, run to who run from it.
19:03:08:09:10
Ancestor. Ancestral Pen. Juxtaposition II
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Like the light'ning in crazed velocity,
The dame, swathed in fury, charged at him.
Humiliating his giant courage,
As his soles had the loyal earth betrayed.
Charged she continuously at the baffled,
Veiled to him: the stir of the race battle.
II
Under a cedar tree at noon he sat,
Reminiscing, " What have I done to prompt that? "
Then saw he an aloof folk passing by:
Like the torpedo ignores ships that ply.
Turned on by jealousy, he pursued it.
("Gutsy!") Till he caught up and possessed it.
Thus is money: run from who run to it.
In jealousy, run to who run from it.
19:03:08:09:10
Ancestor. Ancestral Pen. Juxtaposition II
Watch video on YouTube... https://youtu.be/uI7KiRx-7fI
Written by
Joshuaberry
(Ancestor)
Published 3rd Aug 2019
| Edited 8th Aug 2019
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Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 7:45am
Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 00:15am
Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 7:47am
Thanks...
Which part don't you understand?
I could say few thing about it.
❤
Which part don't you understand?
I could say few thing about it.
❤
Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 8:05am
this is really excellent you're speaking my language
one part stood out with a minor tweak maybe...
"Then saw he an aloof folk passing by: "
perhaps this...
"Then saw he aloof folk passing by:"
exceptional write...
❤
love Brenda
one part stood out with a minor tweak maybe...
"Then saw he an aloof folk passing by: "
perhaps this...
"Then saw he aloof folk passing by:"
exceptional write...
❤
love Brenda
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Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
Thanks Brenda...
But every word used is on purpose...
an aloof... Assonance.... Inversion as well... Could be... He saw an aloof folk passing by.... . Also, the poem is metred in Iambic pentameter(kinda)...
So... Change ain't necessary. Thanks again.
But every word used is on purpose...
an aloof... Assonance.... Inversion as well... Could be... He saw an aloof folk passing by.... . Also, the poem is metred in Iambic pentameter(kinda)...
So... Change ain't necessary. Thanks again.
Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 4:40pm
Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 4:45pm
Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 4:48pm
it is very complex and otherworldly you are speaking of things pertaining to this world but your way of conveying it is not...
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Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 7:53pm
I could have used the pronoun 'person'... But I intentionally used 'folk'... To represent a tribe..
Making it singular as subject...
Also... Aloof is synonymously(according to in which context I'd used it), 'Indifferent '.
Hope you understand now.
Making it singular as subject...
Also... Aloof is synonymously(according to in which context I'd used it), 'Indifferent '.
Hope you understand now.
Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 8:23pm
after giving it some thought I did come to the conclusion you were speaking of a specific group of people... thank you for your clarification ❤
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Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
4th Aug 2019 10:13pm
Re. Juxtaposition II
7th Aug 2019 11:45pm
damn what got me was under a tree. and what provoked that?
damn,,,too young.
damn,,,too young.
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Re: Re. Juxtaposition II
8th Aug 2019 6:49am