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I am trying to put things
together
when they are
apart
I am trying
to scare off
my fear
I am trying to learn
swimming
on the surface
and help dead
to feel free
I am trying
to walk straight
when
I’m completely
drunk
think when
my mind is blank
I am trying
to eat
with the
sealed mouth
and breathe
with my
blackened
lungs
I am trying to see
a bloody sky
looking down
on my
dirty shoes
I am trying to
make friends
with white wall
in front
I am trying to live
while being stuck
in the daily routine
I am trying not
to give up
together
when they are
apart
I am trying
to scare off
my fear
I am trying to learn
swimming
on the surface
and help dead
to feel free
I am trying
to walk straight
when
I’m completely
drunk
think when
my mind is blank
I am trying
to eat
with the
sealed mouth
and breathe
with my
blackened
lungs
I am trying to see
a bloody sky
looking down
on my
dirty shoes
I am trying to
make friends
with white wall
in front
I am trying to live
while being stuck
in the daily routine
I am trying not
to give up
Published 5th Jan 2010
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Anonymous
6th Jan 2010 10:52am
i can relate to almost wholeheartedly, we all want that Natalya, an escape from routine,this poem makes so much sense to me.Lovely one.
7th Jan 2010 7:03pm
thank you for reading. i'm pleased that you could relate to it - and, yes, quite a lot of people are seeking "escape into paradise" nowadays while being stuck in a banal routine. i'm glad you could catch a thought thrown at you from the poem
7th Jan 2010 10:11pm
trying not to give up.. I know the feeling.. for myself I think about suicide everyday.. it has become a challenge to keep myself from trying to leave this world again.. I like this poem though.. I like how you break the lines.. when I do that it's an indication to slow the tempo of how you're reading it.. good job.. cheers hun!!
8th Jan 2010 2:52pm
thank you for the comment. i have never thought about it this way. you definitely dig much deeper than it's seen on the surface. thoughts about death could be one of your biggest inspirations - it usually makes poetry so effective. and that's probably the best you can ever get from a reader - continiuos reaction at anything you write
i break up sentences to control how a reader reads my poem and also i like the lay out of the poem on the page.
i break up sentences to control how a reader reads my poem and also i like the lay out of the poem on the page.
