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harvest hymn
an octet
Cast thy bread upon the waters: for thou shalt find it after many days. Eccl. 11:1 (KJV)
i would serve a better purpose
if i lived my life on earth
seeking the lowly and
feeding the hungry
not expecting
recompense
for my
deeds
seeds
of nigh
prevalence
not excepting
that which is worthy
shall make the barren land
blossom with amazing worth
when the Master yields the surplus
© Copyright 2019 June 10
by Clyve A. Bowen
Cast thy bread upon the waters: for thou shalt find it after many days. Eccl. 11:1 (KJV)
i would serve a better purpose
if i lived my life on earth
seeking the lowly and
feeding the hungry
not expecting
recompense
for my
deeds
seeds
of nigh
prevalence
not excepting
that which is worthy
shall make the barren land
blossom with amazing worth
when the Master yields the surplus
© Copyright 2019 June 10
by Clyve A. Bowen
Published 10th Jun 2019
Author's Note
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This is a mirrored octet. The syllabic count in successive lines progresses downward from 8 to 1 and then upward from 1 to 8. The poem expounds upon the godly principle of sacrificial love, whose bounteous returns come from God and not from man. The fact that it is a hymn is reflective of the spiritual nature of personal sacrifice for the upliftment of others, especially the poor and lowly.
http://mydo.cx/MDZmYTgw
This is a mirrored octet. The syllabic count in successive lines progresses downward from 8 to 1 and then upward from 1 to 8. The poem expounds upon the godly principle of sacrificial love, whose bounteous returns come from God and not from man. The fact that it is a hymn is reflective of the spiritual nature of personal sacrifice for the upliftment of others, especially the poor and lowly.
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Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
11th Jun 2019 11:57am
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11th Jun 2019 4:42pm
That's a highly functional review, HF!
So wonderful to me that you could look at an unfamiliar form and start to appreciate its merits so quickly.
NB Every line is a mirror of its corresponding count line -- just read top and bottom from the outside toward the centre.
You ought to learn more about octets and try out the form for yourself.
Sincerely
cab
So wonderful to me that you could look at an unfamiliar form and start to appreciate its merits so quickly.
NB Every line is a mirror of its corresponding count line -- just read top and bottom from the outside toward the centre.
You ought to learn more about octets and try out the form for yourself.
Sincerely
cab
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
11th Jun 2019 6:38pm
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11th Jun 2019 7:23pm
I have sent a thorough response on the page of your hourglass poem. Please go there.
cab
cab
1st Jul 2019 4:02pm
Hi, HF
I'm hosting an octet competition. Why don't you take a look at the requirements and give it a go? Apart from getting to familiarise yourself with the rules, you will see what others are writing.
Here's a link to the page (copy/paste):
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10863/
Sincerely
cab
I'm hosting an octet competition. Why don't you take a look at the requirements and give it a go? Apart from getting to familiarise yourself with the rules, you will see what others are writing.
Here's a link to the page (copy/paste):
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10863/
Sincerely
cab
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
1st Jul 2019 8:43pm
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1st Jul 2019 8:54pm
