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THE MAUSOLEUM OF THE UNKNOWN SOLDIER
THE MAUSOLEUM OF THE UNKNOWN SOLDIER
Napoleon, you have such a name
that books of life are so proud of .
Those who built that name died like rats .
No one can know their daring acts.
Where is the son who left his mum ?
She wept when she was left so far
from her dear son who went to die
to build the name of Bonaparte .
A man left his young wife and child.
The child did not know why his mum
profusely shed her blood red tears
as his dad did not beat or shout .
The leader proudly sat to write
his famous name on glorious maps ,
whereas the bodies of those rats
were thrown in pits of unknown men .
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
Napoleon, you have such a name
that books of life are so proud of .
Those who built that name died like rats .
No one can know their daring acts.
Where is the son who left his mum ?
She wept when she was left so far
from her dear son who went to die
to build the name of Bonaparte .
A man left his young wife and child.
The child did not know why his mum
profusely shed her blood red tears
as his dad did not beat or shout .
The leader proudly sat to write
his famous name on glorious maps ,
whereas the bodies of those rats
were thrown in pits of unknown men .
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
Published 6th Jun 2019
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6th Jun 2019 7:55pm
I'm wondering if you know what a mausoleum is. This "poem" of yours has nothing to do with one or who is buried there. And expression "pits of unknown men", even if it means a mass grave of unidentified bodies, rather than pits that belong to men who remain anonymous, is not a mausoleum.
7th Jun 2019 9:42pm
Dear Baldwin,
1- please if you don't mind look up the word MAUSOLEUM in any dictionary you want, and you'll find that it fits.
2-PITS OF UNKNOWN MEN: can have the meaning you understand in the poem, and the second meaning you give it. Any structure in English or any other language can have different meaning. We should use contextualization. Thank you. JZ
1- please if you don't mind look up the word MAUSOLEUM in any dictionary you want, and you'll find that it fits.
2-PITS OF UNKNOWN MEN: can have the meaning you understand in the poem, and the second meaning you give it. Any structure in English or any other language can have different meaning. We should use contextualization. Thank you. JZ
8th Jun 2019 3:05am
As Webster's, the Cambridge Dictionary of English, the OED, and virtually all other dictionaries note, a mausoleum is a stately and impressive **building** that contains places for entombment of the dead **above** ground that publicly acknowledges that it is a tomb and that publicly commemorates those who have been laid to rest there. It is **not** a hole in the ground. Nor is it an unmarked mass grave designed to cover up and (until discovered) to disguise the fact that there are dead buried unceremoniously in the earth there. So, no, the term and the title of your "poem" does **not** fit what you wrote.
9th Jun 2019 9:35am
Dear Baldwin,
Thanks for your answer. The soldiers are thrown unknown, but they build the mausoleum above that hole to give it some kind of respect. I am sure you know all that, so that's enough to say. Please, try to be logical without talking much, my friend. JZ
Thanks for your answer. The soldiers are thrown unknown, but they build the mausoleum above that hole to give it some kind of respect. I am sure you know all that, so that's enough to say. Please, try to be logical without talking much, my friend. JZ
I'm not the one being illogical. There is no mention anywhere in your "poem" of anyone -- let alone dead soldiers (the antecedent of your "they") -- building something concrete above a pit into which those who died for Napoleon have been thrown and that serves to commemorate them. Nor is there any reference to anyone showing respect for a hole in the ground (which is what your syntax in your sentence above makes you say) OR for those who have died in Napoleon's wars. Besides that, your title does not speak of soldierS.
