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LOOKING FOR A TREASURE
LOOKING FOR A TREASURE
Show me love and take my heart.
Beggar l am for true love.
It's the hope that l look for.
Far from it l can't survive.
People search for this great wealth
in the eyes of some cute girls.
I peruse and hope to find
my great wealth hidden somewhere.
Love is what my eager soul
hope to melt in to meet peace,
which l've looked for all my life,
valued treasure, hard to gain.
Lucky are those who don't care,
but l am in serious search.
Just one promise l can find,
my great Master, Jesus Christ.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
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Show me love and take my heart.
Beggar l am for true love.
It's the hope that l look for.
Far from it l can't survive.
People search for this great wealth
in the eyes of some cute girls.
I peruse and hope to find
my great wealth hidden somewhere.
Love is what my eager soul
hope to melt in to meet peace,
which l've looked for all my life,
valued treasure, hard to gain.
Lucky are those who don't care,
but l am in serious search.
Just one promise l can find,
my great Master, Jesus Christ.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
____________________________________
Published 4th Jun 2019
| Edited 5th Jun 2019
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9th Jun 2019 6:46pm
So all those who are looking for the wealth of love (including women and gay men) search for it only in the eyes of a particular set of girls? And is it true that the only place that anyone is ever going to find (or have found it) it is in Jesus Christ? Perhaps you'd like to tell Rumi how wrong he was.
And shouldn't this line "Love is what my eager soul hope to melt ..." read "Love is what my eager soul **hopes** to melt ...".
Sorry, but from the point of view of grammar, this is poor writing and it contains enough question begging claims to take a reader right out of what you write.
And shouldn't this line "Love is what my eager soul hope to melt ..." read "Love is what my eager soul **hopes** to melt ...".
Sorry, but from the point of view of grammar, this is poor writing and it contains enough question begging claims to take a reader right out of what you write.
