fur raging

thank you . your question hits home... it's balance. i am trying to keep equilibrium. its trying to keep respect for someone ( my wife/my love) who sees through that what i am doing/failing at is not in line with my bravado front. its a fear thing that she may take/realize something from me that is born intimate with me.  
 
 
 
   
   
 

thats brilliant and inspiring that you read that. thats given me some ideas. Thank you Melia

A cascade of metaphorical imagery kept me engaged - but it wasn't until I read your reply to Sky that it really clicked for me. Intriguing style you have - stay with it.  :))

Thank you Josh....unfortunately i think I  overdo it with the metaphor. i can too easily hide behind it. thank you so much for the encouragement.

It can get too much if the reader has to look up too many words, or the metaphors are too thick on the ground because one has to stop and think - and too much of it can alienate the reader. As a former college lecturer I was always aware you have to take your listeners with you - and pitching it right is a learned crafted art.

"unfortunately i think I  overdo it with the metaphor"
... I could agree sometimes with your 'self-analysis' here. The thing is to keep writing and reading, and gradually by osmosis and practice one's authentic inner voice emerges that needs neither to hide (behind language), nor to 'spell it out' in-yer-face style. It's a balance; a developmental process. That's what DUP is for (IMHO).

I am 100% with what you say. I am a Joe Louis when I dream of being Ali. (another metaphor i know). Its just that I want that one obscure punch ko (but misses) instead of the romance dance of Ali,  like you say, 'to take your listeners with you' .

its great advice, sorely needed. gonna work on it.

as a matter of factly i am readjusting my cathedral walls to make room
for this

m'god this is simply breathtaking!

I can't imagine you not having cathedral walls. :0

thank you, you made my crappy birthday very sweet :)

just for you..

Happy Birthday, hun!!

So vulnerable, so pure. I am enjoying this poem thoroughly… Well done, nomoth.
It gives me a feeling of utter balance and acceptance. Which is what we are all seeking for, I think.

I'm glad you shared this.
Delanee.

Yes!....:) thank you so much Delanee, I appreciate your comment.