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Our End
The doors are locked
And I've lost my key
I knock real hard
You can not hear me
That needle is loud
It’s whispering to you
Telling you all these lies
Telling you what to do
It’s stolen your heart
It’s taken your dreams
I know you won’t stop
Until it’s made you scream
You’ve tarnished yourself
You shattered your character
I can’t even see you now
Behind all these barriers
I can’t love this person
What you turned out to be
The ways you degraded --
And even berated me
I’m lost in this mess
What you’ve made of our home
That must be good shit
Going straight to your dome
You’ve crushed my spirit
You’ve drowned my soul
But this kind of shit --
It’s getting really old
Take a long walk, baby
And don’t come back
Pack all your belongings
And leave me in the past
And I've lost my key
I knock real hard
You can not hear me
That needle is loud
It’s whispering to you
Telling you all these lies
Telling you what to do
It’s stolen your heart
It’s taken your dreams
I know you won’t stop
Until it’s made you scream
You’ve tarnished yourself
You shattered your character
I can’t even see you now
Behind all these barriers
I can’t love this person
What you turned out to be
The ways you degraded --
And even berated me
I’m lost in this mess
What you’ve made of our home
That must be good shit
Going straight to your dome
You’ve crushed my spirit
You’ve drowned my soul
But this kind of shit --
It’s getting really old
Take a long walk, baby
And don’t come back
Pack all your belongings
And leave me in the past
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Re. Our End
12th Apr 2019 4:05am
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12th Apr 2019 4:08am
Thank you, been going through some things. Thank you for the read, the comment, and the love.. always, FeNyX <3
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12th Apr 2019 4:28am
Re. Our End
12th Apr 2019 4:11am
Good title, certainly get that feeling of doneness here, plus it's a really good depiction of the madness on the other side of the wall. Nice one:)
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Re: Re. Our End
12th Apr 2019 4:19am
Thanks! I needed the doneness! Thanks for read, comment, and even more, the love <3
Re. Our End
12th Apr 2019 4:38am
"You can not hear me
That needle is loud
It’s whispering to you
Telling you all these lies
Telling you what to do
It’s stolen your heart
It’s taken your dreams
I know you won’t stop
Until it’s made you scream"
I love these lines; they're very raw & real. Obviously the rest of the poem is great too, but these lines in particular really grasped my attention. Great write, as usual :) x
That needle is loud
It’s whispering to you
Telling you all these lies
Telling you what to do
It’s stolen your heart
It’s taken your dreams
I know you won’t stop
Until it’s made you scream"
I love these lines; they're very raw & real. Obviously the rest of the poem is great too, but these lines in particular really grasped my attention. Great write, as usual :) x
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12th Apr 2019 4:42am
Aww how sweet of you. Yeah, I was really feeling this when I spilled it. Thanks for the read, comment, and love, EmilyRose :)
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Re: Re. Our End
12th Apr 2019 3:13pm
I'm glad someone related to it, even being on the other end of the spectrum. It's hard being on either side, so happy you made it out alive! Thank you for the read, the comment, and the love.
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Anonymous
12th Apr 2019 4:13pm
Addiction, whether it be needle or noise leaves both side defeated, looking around the ring felling quite defeated. You actually might have done a good thing, defiantly a safe thing, cause this thing takes life without strings....You still love...still care deeply, but the commitment was shit on cheaply. Serious ink, I like very much, bravo to you...this took guts! Yeah, like that!!!
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13th Apr 2019 6:56am
Ahh thank you! I do still love and care deeply, that’s what makes cutting ties hard. Thank you for the read, the comment and the love :)
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Anonymous
17th Apr 2019 9:00pm
Wow, super heavy and direct. Well done. Drugs, Christ, so good but such a delicate balance
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21st Apr 2019 7:15pm
Re. Our End
23rd Apr 2019 11:14pm
Don't ever let anyone take your happiness and think they have control in anyway. Tell that motherfucka to call Tyrone or Becky with the long hair.
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23rd Apr 2019 11:27pm
Hahaha, oh but I am learning. Maybe the hard way, I hope not! Thank you for the read, the comment and the love❤️
Re. Our End
24th Apr 2019 9:25pm
this sounds like your healing! Purging those thoughts and feelings and moving on! *fingers crossed* for you
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