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Where Wetness Weeps
the waves moved slowly as did I
caught with beauty and the sky
ev'ry lost feel I happened by
garnered attention in gentle eyes
those blues such gale, in painted look
appear as prose when pictures took
secluded dear, her bonnie's brook
this night lest wait, as passions cook
strings detached slid off thy ground
graced her duties both up then down
beheld such interests, lain cotton sheets
where love with orders fulfill to meet
these lips pure red with bitten marks
caressed her nape with moan full harks
my touch, thy graze, where wetness weeps
thru night, thine heart, true lovers keep
caught with beauty and the sky
ev'ry lost feel I happened by
garnered attention in gentle eyes
those blues such gale, in painted look
appear as prose when pictures took
secluded dear, her bonnie's brook
this night lest wait, as passions cook
strings detached slid off thy ground
graced her duties both up then down
beheld such interests, lain cotton sheets
where love with orders fulfill to meet
these lips pure red with bitten marks
caressed her nape with moan full harks
my touch, thy graze, where wetness weeps
thru night, thine heart, true lovers keep
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Re. Where Wetness Weeps
Anonymous
6th Mar 2019 2:51pm
So many beautiful layers in this poem. It's a sigh on a summer day...or a daydream on a chilly one. Lovely
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6th Mar 2019 2:55pm
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2019 5:07pm
Barely tolerable is a bit generous in my neighborhood. I'm hearing you there!
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6th Mar 2019 5:12pm
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2019 3:29pm
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6th Mar 2019 3:39pm
That's why I asked on your poem if it was your dream or mine? I like mine lol
Thanks Sky
Thanks Sky
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2019 3:44pm
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Re. Where Wetness Weeps
Anonymous
6th Mar 2019 3:42pm
Timothy,
Very nice, my friend!
(Hey, don't be turning into a poet there fella! What about our pact??!!).
Nice writing, Tim.
MZ.
Very nice, my friend!
(Hey, don't be turning into a poet there fella! What about our pact??!!).
Nice writing, Tim.
MZ.
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6th Mar 2019 3:46pm
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6th Mar 2019 3:48pm
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2019 3:50pm
Go East, young man! And if you find a large pile of my money there, please bring it back! Thank you!
MZ.
MZ.
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6th Mar 2019 3:52pm
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2019 3:53pm
I've got them on! (I'm prepared). lol.
Thanks Buddy!
MZ.
Thanks Buddy!
MZ.
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Re. Where Wetness Weeps
6th Mar 2019 4:10pm
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6th Mar 2019 4:17pm
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Anonymous
6th Mar 2019 4:20pm
Dude this is phenomenal!
Very beautiful ink.
Very beautiful ink.
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6th Mar 2019 4:26pm
Re. Where Wetness Weeps
6th Mar 2019 11:43pm
Inspired work, as you indicate in your reply above. Love the archaic touches, like the use of "thine." Fine work, JusTim.
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7th Mar 2019 00:07am
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9th Mar 2019 3:20am
In your yours lies beauty..
What a wonderful experience. Beautiful read x
What a wonderful experience. Beautiful read x
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