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Gravitation
There's an inundation
Like a radiation
It's the oscillation
Pull and hesitation
Forces in relation
Sense is in elation
Acting at a distance
Countering resistance
Not a single instance
Mutual existence
It's powerful but weak
But inevitable we seek
To understand why we can
Transcend the spans of empty hands
There's a satisfaction
In this interaction
More than a distraction
Carnal calefaction
Light is gaining traction
Time and space refraction
Drawing lives together
Emotionally tether
Lighter than a feather
But stronger than forever
It's all that we can feel
When we're climbing up that hill
It drains the rains to strand the sands
As open hearts meet open hands
Like a radiation
It's the oscillation
Pull and hesitation
Forces in relation
Sense is in elation
Acting at a distance
Countering resistance
Not a single instance
Mutual existence
It's powerful but weak
But inevitable we seek
To understand why we can
Transcend the spans of empty hands
There's a satisfaction
In this interaction
More than a distraction
Carnal calefaction
Light is gaining traction
Time and space refraction
Drawing lives together
Emotionally tether
Lighter than a feather
But stronger than forever
It's all that we can feel
When we're climbing up that hill
It drains the rains to strand the sands
As open hearts meet open hands
Published 4th Mar 2019
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10th Mar 2019 5:06pm
It is an absolutely joy for me to find spiritual depths in the sciences, make human connections. You do that artfully, each stanza drawing images for the mind's eye and moving along, allowing each image to flow into a mosaic that holds the heart of the write. Allusions to the strong and weak force as well it seems to me and I love that.
I enjoyed this, but personally find too much rhyme grates on the senses, becoming intrinsically monotonous. In my writing I allow only naturally occurring rhyme and alliteration and very occasionally close a section or piece with an intentional rhyme to seal the harmony of the whole.
Great work. It is good to consider your perspectives and enjoy your artistry.
Daniel
I enjoyed this, but personally find too much rhyme grates on the senses, becoming intrinsically monotonous. In my writing I allow only naturally occurring rhyme and alliteration and very occasionally close a section or piece with an intentional rhyme to seal the harmony of the whole.
Great work. It is good to consider your perspectives and enjoy your artistry.
Daniel
