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Sleep, a distant memory after a wake
Suicide makes sense,
Death; Escape
Solitude is a scrape
On an empty plate
Syllables are sickle cells
In veins full of mace
I close my eyes.
As I see a new day.
Suicide makes sense,
Death; Escape
Solitude is a scrape
On an empty plate
Syllables are sickle cells
In veins full of mace
I close my eyes.
As I see a new day.
Written by
BluntHonestMel
Published 18th Feb 2019
Author's Note
Inspired by the “A Poets Insomnia: Micropoetry Competition.” This is about a typical night after my head hits the pillow. Thanks for reading always.
*40 word limit Including Title*
-Mel
*40 word limit Including Title*
-Mel
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18th Feb 2019 1:39am
this is a very solemn and painful write
solitude can be quite daunting
you created a very potent poem
with very few words ❤
solitude can be quite daunting
you created a very potent poem
with very few words ❤
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18th Feb 2019 2:30am
It was pain before it was understanding, but I am grateful to be haunted by words and imagery as I attempt to sleep. It has become what I live for in a sense. I’m happy it spoke to u 🙏🏽.
*footnote: It starts with suicide and ends with closing my eyes when I’ve reached a new day to say living long enough to try again tomorrow is what makes the everything that precedes worth it. =)
*footnote: It starts with suicide and ends with closing my eyes when I’ve reached a new day to say living long enough to try again tomorrow is what makes the everything that precedes worth it. =)
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18th Feb 2019 2:35am
I live for words too so I really understand you...even though I'm not always so great at interpretation...beautiful sentiment yes... I see now...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
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18th Feb 2019 2:39am
Don’t let me fool u. My interpretation skills are pretty average as well lol. I feel however it speaks to whomever is important. That’s why we pen in the first place 🙏🏽💙.
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18th Feb 2019 2:31am
Thank you 🙏🏽. I was really going for something that “hits home”, so to speak.
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18th Feb 2019 12:39pm
So much depth and pain in so few words marvelous Mel👏👏 really felt this! Deeply resonating content dig this!
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18th Feb 2019 1:24pm
Thank you for the wishes..if any of you feel so inclined you can vote for this piece. Thank you all for your support. Thanks Hunter for always appreciating the darkness. MysticalRose. I wrote this with your style in mind because u make so few words plentiful. 🙏🏽🙏🏽🙏🏽
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