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I could be
I could be like water
That will take form to any container you put it in
I could be like air
That could be everywhere but not see me
I could be like the darkness
That will surround and give you chills
I could be like the rain
That will weigh you down, but still can play
I could be like the fog
That you can't see further than past me
I could be like the sun
That can keep you warm and light the way
I could be like a blanket
That wraps around you cuddling through the night
I could be a like a pond
Being still until you move me
I could be like a bed
Laying your head down to rest
I could be alot of things
I'm just a hug!
That will take form to any container you put it in
I could be like air
That could be everywhere but not see me
I could be like the darkness
That will surround and give you chills
I could be like the rain
That will weigh you down, but still can play
I could be like the fog
That you can't see further than past me
I could be like the sun
That can keep you warm and light the way
I could be like a blanket
That wraps around you cuddling through the night
I could be a like a pond
Being still until you move me
I could be like a bed
Laying your head down to rest
I could be alot of things
I'm just a hug!
Published 16th Nov 2011
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16th Nov 2011 6:08pm
hey there!
nice sentiments here Atropabelladonna, warm and nice.
If it were me i would probably make a few changes.
such as;
could be like water
That will take form to any *vessel you put *me in
I could be like air
That could be everywhere but not *seen
I could be like the darkness
That will surround and give you chills
I could be like the rain
That will weigh you down, but still can play
I could be like the fog
That you can't see *through or *past me
I could be like the sun
That can keep you warm and light the way
I could be like a blanket
That wraps around you cuddling through the night
I could be a like a pond
Being still until you move me
I could be like a bed
*soft but firm for your head to rest
I could be alot of things
I'm just a hug!
just a few suggestions man, hope they help in some way.
nice sentiments here Atropabelladonna, warm and nice.
If it were me i would probably make a few changes.
such as;
could be like water
That will take form to any *vessel you put *me in
I could be like air
That could be everywhere but not *seen
I could be like the darkness
That will surround and give you chills
I could be like the rain
That will weigh you down, but still can play
I could be like the fog
That you can't see *through or *past me
I could be like the sun
That can keep you warm and light the way
I could be like a blanket
That wraps around you cuddling through the night
I could be a like a pond
Being still until you move me
I could be like a bed
*soft but firm for your head to rest
I could be alot of things
I'm just a hug!
just a few suggestions man, hope they help in some way.
Thanks for the feedback. I just write as it goes. I dont proof anything.
3rd Mar 2012 2:03am
I love the way you used nature in this. We can learn so much from nature if we just take a minute to look.
Storms when relationships fail.
Beauty like a flower when love is right.
Happiness as bright as the sunshine.
Sadness on a dark clouded day.
Weary to see when the fog rolls in.
Storms when relationships fail.
Beauty like a flower when love is right.
Happiness as bright as the sunshine.
Sadness on a dark clouded day.
Weary to see when the fog rolls in.
Thank you for the comment. Sometimes we must learn from what life us life.
