Full of Emptiness

Loving the flow of this one, man! Excellent, well-written and very well thought out. I thought the "arteries artfully" part was especially clever :)

Thanks the sharing with us.

Thank you for reading!

Very dark, but beautifully written! You did a wonderful job. Also, the first verse reminds me of a song my Smoky Robinson:

"People say I'm the life of the party
because I tell a joke or two,
and though I might be laughing loud and hearty,
deep inside I'm blue"

Enjoyed it :)

Thank you for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Dark is my specialty lol

There's quite a bit of wonderful, evocative imagery in this one. I especially like the bits about hatred clogging the arteries of the hater, (presumably it's the hater's own arteries,) and being "an alien / Parading the wayward damned / Around a nightmare stadium." The idea of "the wayward damned" following the narrator around a giant arena is captivating, and does a good job of dividing the narrator from their family, friends, and society, and emphasizing their alienation and darkness.

I also like how, even though it never explicitly dips into second person, (it never says "you" or "your" for instance,) I intuitively interpreted it as second person; the narrator appeared to speak to those who would miss them and cry over them after they'd died, and who had failed to see their "internal disharmony" and "Concealed hatred." I think that gives it a more tragic spin, as though the narrator had told their friends and family about their coming death, but they had failed to comprehend or acknowledge the message. And it draws the audience in, one can easily empathize with the guilt the loved ones feel over failing to save the one who died.

Wonderful work.

Thank you for reading and leaving such an in depth comment of your interpretations and what you visualised. That's pretty much exactly what I was going for so I'm glad it came across

That it is, thank you for reading!