start over again

Intriguing

thank you, im going through stuff and trying so hard to write something substantial, this is all that came out yesterday

Substantial to you or in a broader sense?

meaning something good, i dont think this was very good but i shared it anyway

thanks

Really like the structure of this ... the breaks ... they convey ... also like the lower case "i" ... so e.e. cummings ... excellent continued rhyme in the final stanza ...

thank you so much! i appreciate that a lot. i am a big ee cummings fan 💗

You are most welcome ... I applaud cummings's originality ... I had to read his collected works for a poetry class ... then apprentice a poem in his style ... really made me work my poetic muscles ...

I really enjoyed the poem. Nicely written.

My advice to you, based on your commentary: Focus less on how good your poetry is and more on self expression. I mean, poetry is subjective anyway. Only some people are going to enjoy it. The best poem in the world to me might be a complete literary disaster to another. Even if no one likes your poem, if it made you feel good to write it, who cares how good it is.

I myself struggle with the exact same issue. If I get too technical and focused on writing something 'good', a lot of times I end up stunting my creativity and hitting a point of writer's block. Inspiration comes and goes, and some of the best poems I've ever written (at least in my opinion) happened naturally without me really having to try so hard to write something good.

With that said, just try to write a little something every day, expand your vocabulary, read poems, and gather your inspirations. You'll continue to get better at writing, and even though you won't write something 'good' every day, every now and then you'll write something that you're really proud of. Those are the moments that make it all worth the while...

Thanks for sharing, by the way!

thank you so much, just read this now. i really appreciate that

A very emotional and deep poem.  Nicely stated....xo

thank you lovely

Hmmm nice

My interpretation of this is undoubtedly different than yours. It gives me a certain visual image. A subjective fantasy filtered through my own lens. I think that's one of the best things about writing.

In any case, I feel inspired by your work, here.

Thank you for sharing.