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A dancing field of consciousness we are all absorbed into.
A strange, lovely dimension we've been sent to.
A magnificent, bizarre planet we've been placed upon.
A truly weird and wonderful experience we get to have here.
As time passes I appreciate this existence more and more.
Not falling into nihilism as I did before.
No more do I look at life as a chore.
No longer focusing on the gore and the horrors of the world,
although it's difficult to ignore the continuous stream of negativity that seems to slither in the shadows of my psyche.
So easy to dwell in this looming pessimism.
It seems to suck you in, so here I sit, in my hand, a pen,
expressions of within.
A strange, lovely dimension we've been sent to.
A magnificent, bizarre planet we've been placed upon.
A truly weird and wonderful experience we get to have here.
As time passes I appreciate this existence more and more.
Not falling into nihilism as I did before.
No more do I look at life as a chore.
No longer focusing on the gore and the horrors of the world,
although it's difficult to ignore the continuous stream of negativity that seems to slither in the shadows of my psyche.
So easy to dwell in this looming pessimism.
It seems to suck you in, so here I sit, in my hand, a pen,
expressions of within.
Published 3rd Dec 2018
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"Nature is a vast celebration of energy." -Alan Watts
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3rd Dec 2018 3:24pm
Hello Hunter...
I certainly agree with the sentiment you express in your piece...
since we get what we expect from this life...
But I do wish the rhyme and rhythm you expressed in stanzas two and three
was apparent in the first as well... no offense intended...but
I sorta think that it might be...
that in the first stanza the sentences are flipped...
hence predicate first...
presenting those four sentences in reverse...
like sentences in a foreign tongue...
it shifted my ear to a different gear...
Hunter... this is only my opinion...
no rule or reg involved... you may have intended to say it just as you did...
which is just fine too...there's no onus on you. ;D Ely
I certainly agree with the sentiment you express in your piece...
since we get what we expect from this life...
But I do wish the rhyme and rhythm you expressed in stanzas two and three
was apparent in the first as well... no offense intended...but
I sorta think that it might be...
that in the first stanza the sentences are flipped...
hence predicate first...
presenting those four sentences in reverse...
like sentences in a foreign tongue...
it shifted my ear to a different gear...
Hunter... this is only my opinion...
no rule or reg involved... you may have intended to say it just as you did...
which is just fine too...there's no onus on you. ;D Ely
4th Dec 2018 00:12am
Thanks for the awesome comment as always Ely🙏 always appreciate your critiques I agree it might read better if it were flipped but it sort of Just came out that way. I value your opinion and appreciate it thanks for reading✌🙏
Anonymous
3rd Dec 2018 10:58pm
Awesome, Hunter! Life is strange, and when you look at it, there is some strange crap going on!(a giant, 17 million degree, ball of constant nuclear explosions, keeping us alive! Weird, giant, animals, and plants that eat animals, and complex body systems, and space that goes on forever, while we look at stars that burned out millions of years ago! It's freaking weird!). Kind of makes you think that there must be something else. All this weird shit couldn't have just occurred from a big explosion!
You know, you always make me think, my man!
Love your writes!
MZ.
You know, you always make me think, my man!
Love your writes!
MZ.
4th Dec 2018 00:14am
Thanks alot Matt!✌yes super strange indeed as everything you stated is strange as fuck ha I appreciate the comment as always thanks🙏
