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flame
greener than goslings
my moth stalls,
your petticoat flower
settling about you--
a dab of innocence
to covet a moment's breath,
shattering modesties
with the tiniest
delicate hand...
my moth stalls,
your petticoat flower
settling about you--
a dab of innocence
to covet a moment's breath,
shattering modesties
with the tiniest
delicate hand...
Published 8th Nov 2011
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Anonymous
10th Nov 2011 11:53pm
I've just looked up "gosling" on dictionary.com and its offered me two possible definitions: "a young goose" or "a foolish, inexperienced person". So my questions are these: which one do you mean and why are they "green"? Also, what does the moth represent? I'm tempted to ask if it's a typo and you meant to write "mouth".
Anyway, the poem as a whole is delightfully Victorian and bristling with barely contained passion. The line "a dab of innocence/to covet a moment's breath" is gorgeous. So elegantly expressed, it makes me think of a young, genteel lady taking a sharp intake of breath when faced with sudden sexual longing for the narrator.
All JMHO of course. Thanks for the read, Abra.
Anyway, the poem as a whole is delightfully Victorian and bristling with barely contained passion. The line "a dab of innocence/to covet a moment's breath" is gorgeous. So elegantly expressed, it makes me think of a young, genteel lady taking a sharp intake of breath when faced with sudden sexual longing for the narrator.
All JMHO of course. Thanks for the read, Abra.
