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The Tree Of Life
The grass feels coarse at my feet
The bark of the tree scrapes my knees
My nails dig in collecting sap beneeth them
I reach a thick steady leafy branch
Crawling out along it sitting midway
The stiff rope drapes nicely over the branch
Looking out as I rest atop it
Thoughts begin collecting and tears fall
One snug pull and the rope becomes tight
A quick look to the dark night sky
The rope collaring my neck
A final deep breath exhaling an apology
Down I fall to a quick sudden stop
A breath can not be conjured up
Arms and legs dangle as numbness consumes
The light of darkness slowly becomes unseen
Twitching and shaking my numb limp body
One last call of a crow can be heard
I become a dead limb on a life filled tree
Things finally go quiet and blank
My body now feeds life into the world
The bark of the tree scrapes my knees
My nails dig in collecting sap beneeth them
I reach a thick steady leafy branch
Crawling out along it sitting midway
The stiff rope drapes nicely over the branch
Looking out as I rest atop it
Thoughts begin collecting and tears fall
One snug pull and the rope becomes tight
A quick look to the dark night sky
The rope collaring my neck
A final deep breath exhaling an apology
Down I fall to a quick sudden stop
A breath can not be conjured up
Arms and legs dangle as numbness consumes
The light of darkness slowly becomes unseen
Twitching and shaking my numb limp body
One last call of a crow can be heard
I become a dead limb on a life filled tree
Things finally go quiet and blank
My body now feeds life into the world
Published 5th Nov 2011
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24th Jun 2013 11:18pm
Despite putting this into the dark category, I actually see some optimism in this. In fact, I see optimism in almost any suicide poem because the fact that the main character is committing suicide shows that they see some good coming out of it. For instance, here, you make the claim that the main character's death gave life to all others (and I totally do NOT intend to compare this to Jesus, but there are definitely similarities)... I'm the type of psychopath that would put this in the upbeat category XD. Another very intriguing write... I definitely appreciate your variety and your willingness to try something new. You and I should write a collab... pm me if you like the idea.
