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Haiku #18 ...autumn...
caterpillar summer
winter cocoon awaits...
spring butterfly
winter cocoon awaits...
spring butterfly
Published 5th Oct 2018
| Edited 27th Mar 2019
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5th Oct 2018 3:28pm
Very beautiful Senryu Ely, I adore butterflies 🦋
Loved this ❤️
Zazzles
Butterflies lay still
Crabgrass started a riot
soon snow makes landfall
Loved this ❤️
Zazzles
Butterflies lay still
Crabgrass started a riot
soon snow makes landfall
5th Oct 2018 5:25pm
5th Oct 2018 5:38pm
Yah-huh I love your corrections, you’re like having my own personal English teacher I love it LOL
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5th Oct 2018 10:11pm
Oh... that reminds me... part 1, next-to-last sentence...*since* apple picking..
part 2, ph 1, line 3...''It stands about a foot and a half feet tall in diameter''?... pardon... Ya know you is sending a very mixed message here, and I was thinking you might like to re-visit this sentence.
part 3...Done
part 4...ain't seen one
part...ph 5, line 1...pulled out a *grenade*
ph 5, line 3... *vial* and *vial*... not vile... OK? now you are pretty much caught up... Ely
part 2, ph 1, line 3...''It stands about a foot and a half feet tall in diameter''?... pardon... Ya know you is sending a very mixed message here, and I was thinking you might like to re-visit this sentence.
part 3...Done
part 4...ain't seen one
part...ph 5, line 1...pulled out a *grenade*
ph 5, line 3... *vial* and *vial*... not vile... OK? now you are pretty much caught up... Ely
