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First Time
Exhilarating
Terrifying
Freedom
Being pushed back
And elevated
Soaring
Tremors
Beauty
My first time
In an airplane
Terrifying
Freedom
Being pushed back
And elevated
Soaring
Tremors
Beauty
My first time
In an airplane
Published 25th Sep 2018
Author's Note
Submission for Losing Your Virginity competition.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Anonymous
25th Sep 2018 1:28am
Ha! You had me, then you got me again(I'm very naive I think).
Very nice.
Matthew.
Very nice.
Matthew.
25th Sep 2018 1:31am
25th Sep 2018 2:08am
25th Sep 2018 3:01am
25th Sep 2018 4:15am
Up until the very last line, there were so many things this could have referenced and still been excellent regardless. And then the last line hits...and it makes total sense. You’re showing a mastery of leading your audience where you want them to go, and with flair. Very impressive, Meddy!
25th Sep 2018 1:35pm
25th Sep 2018 1:35pm
It's got my vote! Love the unexpected ending, 'twist' almost.
Sure fire winner!
Sure fire winner!
25th Sep 2018 1:37pm
Thank you, but with the talent found here, I'm sure there's going to be quite a few contenders. I appreciate your kindness.
25th Sep 2018 1:38pm
25th Sep 2018 1:39pm
26th Sep 2018 00:02am
Would you like a beverage or snack? Would you like to join the mile high club? Excellent write, you got me with the ending. Was totally thinking along different lines.
26th Sep 2018 00:05am
Beverage please and no thank you to the mile high club invite.
I never fly and f***
I never fly and f***
Airplane... Encapsulated human flesh ...
And the feeling that we've taken something else we us...Our homes and its rooms?... Who knows...
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And the feeling that we've taken something else we us...Our homes and its rooms?... Who knows...
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27th Sep 2018 1:16am
27th Sep 2018 3:49pm
