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Origami
With each other, our surface is better
Corner to corner we come together
Although, our alliance is so much fresher
We crease away when we feel the pressure
Whilst all these folds thicken our centre
There’s a beak in front, yet we have no feathers
A wing each side, we could fly forever
We may have no feet below however
We stand in union above all measure
The final mould, we made this treasure
Corner to corner we come together
Although, our alliance is so much fresher
We crease away when we feel the pressure
Whilst all these folds thicken our centre
There’s a beak in front, yet we have no feathers
A wing each side, we could fly forever
We may have no feet below however
We stand in union above all measure
The final mould, we made this treasure
Published 10th Sep 2018
| Edited 9th Jan 2019
Author's Note
This was originally about my relationships with those that I keep dear, then I noticed the pattern when I came up with the line "We crease away when we feel the pressure" - That's when I decided to use the metaphor of Origami
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11th Sep 2018 6:10am
18th Sep 2018 9:42pm
Wasn't sure at first if the poem would work with so many similarly rhyming end-words but it does - and maybe because it alludes to the process of doing origami (many similar line folds) and because you carry with it a shadow-story. Nice.
20th Sep 2018 4:07pm
Thank for for your comments Josh - You've actually noticed what I was trying to do :)
I don't normally used this many similarly rhyming end-words in my poems, although I certainly had fun figuring out how to make this one work. I'm glad it wasn't in vain. Thank you
I don't normally used this many similarly rhyming end-words in my poems, although I certainly had fun figuring out how to make this one work. I'm glad it wasn't in vain. Thank you
