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Last call
Red dress, long black hair
last call for drinks
no ice...life is cold enough
she lights another cigarrette
Johnny left town
said he'd be back for Valentine's Day
two years went by since
the juke box plays Nina Simone
nicotine drips down the walls
like raindrops on a window
like the tears she cried
dried flower...fragrance lost
such crumbling beauty
empty glass
empty eyes
closing time
tomorrow is
another day
last call for drinks
no ice...life is cold enough
she lights another cigarrette
Johnny left town
said he'd be back for Valentine's Day
two years went by since
the juke box plays Nina Simone
nicotine drips down the walls
like raindrops on a window
like the tears she cried
dried flower...fragrance lost
such crumbling beauty
empty glass
empty eyes
closing time
tomorrow is
another day
Written by
Angelast1
Published 25th Aug 2018
| Edited 26th Aug 2018
Author's Note
This was written for the "Barfly" comp
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Last call
25th Aug 2018 6:53pm
Dickens...Charles Dickens..
goodluck...sure you won't need much
after this stunning entry there
lovely depiction
of solemn silence
of heartache
and the story
job.
goodluck...sure you won't need much
after this stunning entry there
lovely depiction
of solemn silence
of heartache
and the story
job.
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Re: Re. Last call
25th Aug 2018 7:28pm
Re. Last call
26th Aug 2018 1:05am
Poor thing... sounds as if ...
she exists...
in a state of
persistent shock.! Good write, Ange... Ely
she exists...
in a state of
persistent shock.! Good write, Ange... Ely
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Re: Re. Last call
26th Aug 2018 1:24am
I thought after writing this how depressing it is. I have seen those characters in bars though...tragically stuck in the past. You definately got the picture....
Re. Last call
26th Aug 2018 2:01am
Re. Last call
26th Aug 2018 7:15am
Wow u capture and picture well with your fine imagination. I would be coming to read yours more often whenever I login. Kudos.
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Re: Re. Last call
26th Aug 2018 4:16pm
Thanks Zaynab... I feel honered you like this. The mood in this one is rather depressing but that's what happens to some people.
Re. Last call
29th Aug 2018 4:37pm
A poem of love and longing and heartbreak. I love the way you put it together. Good job!
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2nd Sep 2018 3:34pm
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Re. Last call
13th Sep 2018 4:30am
Liked the capture here of
the many who haunt bars regularly. I always try I guess their story. Suppose one of these days, I could try to actually engage...
the many who haunt bars regularly. I always try I guess their story. Suppose one of these days, I could try to actually engage...
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Re: Re. Last call
13th Sep 2018 5:38am
I am not much of a barfly these days but I have seen many of those characters in my earlyer days....guys too.
Thank you for read and comment Rachel
Thank you for read and comment Rachel