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Rotting
Am I looking ragged
Disheveled
Here
At the end of my rope
Entangled by knots
Deep within
Depressed misery
And what could only be described as
Plot
I thought of things
I fought
Though I forgot
Laying back down upon this apathy
And out sourcing
Scorching
In shorter
Cheaper terms
I rott
Disheveled
Here
At the end of my rope
Entangled by knots
Deep within
Depressed misery
And what could only be described as
Plot
I thought of things
I fought
Though I forgot
Laying back down upon this apathy
And out sourcing
Scorching
In shorter
Cheaper terms
I rott
Published 25th Oct 2011
| Edited 26th Oct 2011
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28th Oct 2011 3:16pm
Only note: Rot is spelled with one r.
Other than that one tiny thing this was a very good work. The beat, the pacing, the content all great. I love how you made it a narrative and out of your control at the end of the first stanza. Great work.
Other than that one tiny thing this was a very good work. The beat, the pacing, the content all great. I love how you made it a narrative and out of your control at the end of the first stanza. Great work.
