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Between me and the Universe
Gimme love
Gimme love
Gimme love...open it up and dump it on me
The whole fuckin' thing...pour it out
On me
Before I'm out of aces
Before the game is up
Before I go empty
Pour it the fuck on me
So I can go and spread it
Before the curtain falls
Before the stage grows silent
Gimme love....
Gimme love
Gimme love...open it up and dump it on me
The whole fuckin' thing...pour it out
On me
Before I'm out of aces
Before the game is up
Before I go empty
Pour it the fuck on me
So I can go and spread it
Before the curtain falls
Before the stage grows silent
Gimme love....
Author's Note
This is a prayer!
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Re. Between me and the Universe
7th Jul 2018 9:34pm
Great cadence with this one ... such urgency ... perfectly captured ...
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Re: Re. Between me and the Universe
8th Jul 2018 4:00am
Re. Between me and the Universe
I can almost hear it to music...
It's got real Punch... very nice work Ange.
Just one itty bitty thing?
... In Lines four... and nine?
the word you want is POUR...
those homophonic words can be difficult to deal with. Love ya, Ely
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It's got real Punch... very nice work Ange.
Just one itty bitty thing?
... In Lines four... and nine?
the word you want is POUR...
those homophonic words can be difficult to deal with. Love ya, Ely
.
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Re: Re. Between me and the Universe
8th Jul 2018 4:02am
Yes, there was music too...in the background...a spark. You got it!
Thanks for the correction. It is taken care off.
Thanks for the correction. It is taken care off.
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8th Jul 2018 6:12am
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Re. Between me and the Universe
7th Jul 2018 11:43pm
dearest Angel a prayer I can understand
powerful heartfelt outpouring..
love Raven
powerful heartfelt outpouring..
love Raven
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