Present Rage

This is a powerful declaration, Nico. Your anger is strong, and I don't think anyone would want to mess with you.

Nice work, and welcome to DUP!

Much appreciation. I think? Haha
You are right though...

As the say goes: "If people don't respect you, they must fear you."

It's better than being pushed aside by people who don't give a shit about you.

I couldn't agree with you more. Because that getting pushed around shit, just doesn't fly anymore. Lol

it looks like you had total control over your emotional, very excellent work

Powerful presented rap...great flow

hey, lady of the lake throws your book of poems at me!!!!

sauerkraut apathy, I'm sitting here, smoke in on the lips, a can of bad manners beside me,

my drug of choice, snorting wasabi, with disturbed, the sounds of silence on hight rotation.

now to your poem-----

Present Rage

Right the fuck now, I am morbidly enraged
Certifiably deranged, rearranged, on a rampage
Unnamed and tight caged, my fist holds a grenade
Riotous thoughts in front, preparing to engage

Right the fuck now, I am stuck in a tangent outrage
The fast lane, Champaign, Cocaine, chest pain
Phases changed, new migraine, untouched acid rain
Fuck your face, hop a train, numb the pain, with lidocaine

Right the fuck now, I am as erratic as the old radio in the attic
Atmospheric static, semiautomatic, polyaromatic addicts?
Brain's being problematic, mathematical schematics make shit hectic
Pretty reckless, disconnected, accepted and rejected

My home inside my head
Is comforting instead
Of being painted red
And filling up the dread

Right the fuck now, delving into hallucinations
The foundation of rotation, repeating the quotation
Prolonged high exposure, will increase( the) temptation
Standing stagnant, anticipation amplified by asphyxiation
Sitting silent, beautifully, bloodied, brutality
Self aquired human immunity
Ha! Fuckery, nudity, fruit tree, rupee, mutiny

you will see my corrections in brackets

, at a logical moment in time on a flying horse

through a canyon echoing biblical deep-throated squalls.

there has been a tuning fork put into your poem, perfect, perfect, perfect,

this poem pulsates, resonates, the injury words weld together,

this is just so good,  

 

Lol oh shit. Thank you so much! You're a doll. I haven't written that well in a year or so and now I feel pretty good about it.

I have recommended this poem to another person on this site;

That's just awesome. Thanks again.

Crikey, this is an amazing write, that I can did on many levels.

Fantastic word structure, I am really loving your work.

Keep on keeping on and stay punk.

Marcus (Zenith)