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Suffering's Lyre
Can there be happiness inside
anything but loneliness
with one idealised vision -
Matilda, Beatrice, even a childhood pet?
Freed from consternation by
a burning of the soul
on Heaven's great, refined pyre,
so what remains is loveliness
unfatigued by time, or suffering's lyre,
which plays always on earth...
The trunks and leaves are lit by one
serene and understanding sun,
followed by night's caressing of the trees
and streams, that is not seen
in city nights, or days,
where I sit now,
to dream of walking in Eden
beyond this place where beauty lies
with melancholia.
Where suffering's lyre
complicates all holiness.
anything but loneliness
with one idealised vision -
Matilda, Beatrice, even a childhood pet?
Freed from consternation by
a burning of the soul
on Heaven's great, refined pyre,
so what remains is loveliness
unfatigued by time, or suffering's lyre,
which plays always on earth...
The trunks and leaves are lit by one
serene and understanding sun,
followed by night's caressing of the trees
and streams, that is not seen
in city nights, or days,
where I sit now,
to dream of walking in Eden
beyond this place where beauty lies
with melancholia.
Where suffering's lyre
complicates all holiness.
Published 7th Jun 2018
| Edited 26th Sep 2018
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8th Jun 2018 1:26pm
Hullo, and how do you do
gand read, Jack. kinda classical in it's language. I wondered about the comma after heaven's great.
i liked the couple of ryhmes, they worked well.
good to see you posting here again, man
*hat tip*
gand read, Jack. kinda classical in it's language. I wondered about the comma after heaven's great.
i liked the couple of ryhmes, they worked well.
good to see you posting here again, man
*hat tip*
8th Jun 2018 1:52pm
Thanks! I got the impetus from reading a commentary on Dante’s Divine Comedy, hence the mention of Matilda and Beatrice, characters in that poem. Your critique is always astute and lovely, thank you. x
Jack my dear friend
I love your poem
though I struggle to say why..
it made me feel lighter somehow..
like I had entered your version of Eden
where I knew i would be well at home..
you have a gorgeous mind..
love Brenda
I love your poem
though I struggle to say why..
it made me feel lighter somehow..
like I had entered your version of Eden
where I knew i would be well at home..
you have a gorgeous mind..
love Brenda
8th Jul 2018 10:55pm
Dear Jack,
It's a lovely poem from the first stanza. You have found happiness in loneliness and deep thoughts, and expressed it in a very poetical way. Thi is true poetry.
It's a lovely poem from the first stanza. You have found happiness in loneliness and deep thoughts, and expressed it in a very poetical way. Thi is true poetry.
