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What I want
The veins to help the blood flow
It keeps us breathing everyday
Healthy and have us moving
Redness of the color
The millions of beats until it stop one day
That's what they see
Through my eyes its more than the knowledge
The shape is unexplainable
Forget about the logic behind it
The feelings of different emotions
What you hide and what you show
It makes you and brakes you
I'm here for that one thing
It makes us stronger
It makes us complete.....
I want your HEART ! ! !
It keeps us breathing everyday
Healthy and have us moving
Redness of the color
The millions of beats until it stop one day
That's what they see
Through my eyes its more than the knowledge
The shape is unexplainable
Forget about the logic behind it
The feelings of different emotions
What you hide and what you show
It makes you and brakes you
I'm here for that one thing
It makes us stronger
It makes us complete.....
I want your HEART ! ! !
Published 18th Oct 2011
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Anonymous
5th Sep 2013 12:16pm
Ooh, I like...the ending was a bit dramatic, perhaps losing the capitals and exclamation marks might actually make it a little more effective. Less is more! But that's just my opinion, feel free to ignore :)
Love the lines: "Through my eyes its more than the knowledge/The shape is unexplainable."
There's something very Slipknot-esque about these words. Enjoyed it very much!
Love the lines: "Through my eyes its more than the knowledge/The shape is unexplainable."
There's something very Slipknot-esque about these words. Enjoyed it very much!
