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as one like gods
like tree branch shadows,
my fingers stretch between your thigh
and i feel your love
coating my fingertips,
and your tongue
like a velvet robe
so soft against the most sentsitive sections of my skin
and ur breast against my chest, our hearts intertwined beating as
one being in our chest,
our sensitivities become one strength
we our gods we can create
love, to life
your breath lingers by my hips,
as you slip to the south, a river to the gulf,
you leave your trail of sin along my body,
take my ambrosia,
in your mouth,
trailing back up the river now, and again our hearts beating as one
and our breath intertwines
my fingers stretch between your thigh
and i feel your love
coating my fingertips,
and your tongue
like a velvet robe
so soft against the most sentsitive sections of my skin
and ur breast against my chest, our hearts intertwined beating as
one being in our chest,
our sensitivities become one strength
we our gods we can create
love, to life
your breath lingers by my hips,
as you slip to the south, a river to the gulf,
you leave your trail of sin along my body,
take my ambrosia,
in your mouth,
trailing back up the river now, and again our hearts beating as one
and our breath intertwines
Published 23rd Apr 2018
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23rd Apr 2018 10:00am
Simple and sweet with just theright amount of intimacy and kink. Nicely done.
23rd Apr 2018 10:02am
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23rd Apr 2018 9:17pm
24th Apr 2018 3:12am
lol I think you should stay tuned...I have a talent for erotic poems and prose I think. but thatnk you darlin
This is quite a soft & gentle poem of desire. I would be tempted to rework the end lines to something slightly more direct, like:
trailing back up the river now, again our hearts beat as one
as our breath intertwines
for example.
Nice work though Brian. :-)
trailing back up the river now, again our hearts beat as one
as our breath intertwines
for example.
Nice work though Brian. :-)
24th Apr 2018 3:13am
