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Mephistopheles

twist the truth of every side
look inside the �egals eye..
befalls our character untreated guilty
changing them mind and whats not silky...
There is no hope apone whats been told
unfavor mouth of weeping cold..
people of the denial and awaited soul
Twisting truth and stabilized �role....
given up trying to understand how
Mephistopheles controle what you have know...

-Kumiko Yamamoto

Written by AlexnEmoLand

(RevolutionOfAlex)

Published 10th Oct 2011 | Edited 30th Nov 2011

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Nameless_Traveler (Andrew Kerklaan)

- Edited 15th Oct 2011 5:23am

15th Oct 2011 5:22am

I really like this one so far of your work that I've read, again I think you could use some spelling tweaks but I can visually see how you've grown as a writter going from your older work to this.

maybe keep in mind not all poetry has to rhyme, sometimes it's just using imaginative images to connect meaning filled ideas. It's really up to the artist though. (not trying to discourage or insault you)

Line 5 I think you mean "upon"

all in all a really nice piece just work on your spelling is all I'd suggest but still good work keep it up!