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playful lust
a girl and a boy
in a bedroom, underwater
the water is lingering
around their heavily aching skin
only for each other, do they crave to touch
swim closer and closer
the cold undercurrents of the ocean
change in temperature
as the heat of two bodies
dramatically takes a rapid rise
the burning sun takes over
surrounding water bubbling and bubbling
a warm jacuzzi now sits
listening to the lust of two wanting souls
taking on their aching want
they move closer and closer
their hand's touch
bubbles are rapidly leaping
they are listening, responding
to the desires in the sea
their lips touch, hands are intertwined
sea simply falling away
they are in a bedroom encased in lust
the walls have disappeared
the ceiling of no importance
everything has faded away
fish swim by, some even touch
their naked and exposed skin
with their fins, accidentally of course
but the lovers fail to notice
so engaged in a creamy like kiss
attentive to the feel of soft and friendly lips
they forget their surroundings, the bedroom
the container, even the bed loses its touch
kissing and rolling around on weightless air
rising, funny bubbles
carried away amongst the sheets
of weightless air
everything else has fallen by the wayside
nothing else matters
when it comes to the meeting
of a lustful girl and a lustful boy
in a bedroom, underwater
the water is lingering
around their heavily aching skin
only for each other, do they crave to touch
swim closer and closer
the cold undercurrents of the ocean
change in temperature
as the heat of two bodies
dramatically takes a rapid rise
the burning sun takes over
surrounding water bubbling and bubbling
a warm jacuzzi now sits
listening to the lust of two wanting souls
taking on their aching want
they move closer and closer
their hand's touch
bubbles are rapidly leaping
they are listening, responding
to the desires in the sea
their lips touch, hands are intertwined
sea simply falling away
they are in a bedroom encased in lust
the walls have disappeared
the ceiling of no importance
everything has faded away
fish swim by, some even touch
their naked and exposed skin
with their fins, accidentally of course
but the lovers fail to notice
so engaged in a creamy like kiss
attentive to the feel of soft and friendly lips
they forget their surroundings, the bedroom
the container, even the bed loses its touch
kissing and rolling around on weightless air
rising, funny bubbles
carried away amongst the sheets
of weightless air
everything else has fallen by the wayside
nothing else matters
when it comes to the meeting
of a lustful girl and a lustful boy
Author's Note
i just wanted to try writing an erotic poem , im not even sure if this would be classed as erotic or even if its any good.. but i tried
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Re. playful lust
Anonymous
23rd Mar 2018 2:13pm
You touched upon erotica with a very tactful edge. A beautifully flowing write.
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Re: Re. playful lust
23rd Mar 2018 8:00pm
Re. playful lust
23rd Mar 2018 3:52pm
Delightful imagery...easily visualized...would make a beautiful video...first try, well done...looking forward to more....
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Re: Re. playful lust
23rd Mar 2018 8:02pm
thankyou bc :-) i appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on this .
Re. playful lust
23rd Mar 2018 5:34pm
I enjoyed your playful prose dear poet. A drawn out affair which is always appealing.
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Re: Re. playful lust
23rd Mar 2018 8:06pm
Re. playful lust
23rd Mar 2018 9:38pm
Certainly erotic, though I never think of a Jacuzzi or tank being in a bedroom. Perhaps it's some exotic hotel.
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Re: Re. playful lust
23rd Mar 2018 10:16pm
lol, not at all ! my idea was to relate being in a bedroom to being underwater...the rapid bubbles, the glowing and warming water having changed temperature by the heat of their bodies..sorry if it did not make enough sense to you ,
Re: Re. playful lust
24th Mar 2018 8:45am
I stand enlightened. You've also just reminded me of Tina Turner's song about "Steamy windows - coming from the body heat"!
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Re. playful lust
27th Mar 2018 5:49pm
Superbly original idea of lovers about to make love surrounded by ocean water. And your imagery of them heating the water surrounding them is just out of this world fantastic! You really know how to paint a scene and make it come alive for the imagination. Truly wonderful creation. Being in the sea on the threshold of lovemaking just heats me up. ;-)
John
John
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Re: Re. playful lust
27th Mar 2018 9:07pm
thankyou john :-) glad you enjoyed reading this and thankyou for your honest opinion.
Re. playful lust
1st May 2018 6:33am
This is a really really erotic piece. I like how the lines flow into each other, further enhancing the readers experience. I like the imagery, the comparison and the descriptiveness.
I like.
I like.
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Re: Re. playful lust
17th Nov 2018 1:37pm
Re. playful lust
17th May 2018 5:00pm
just awesome the way you write everything, and like your other poems too
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Re: Re. playful lust
17th Nov 2018 1:41pm
thankyou and i am sorry for the late reply , i seem to have missed replying to a few comments ..
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Re: Re. playful lust
17th Nov 2018 1:36pm
i'm sorry , i did not mean to '' not reply '' thankyou for your comment and i am glad you like this poem..
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Re: Re. playful lust
17th Nov 2018 1:45pm
i have no idea...
i do not mind reading an erotic poem aslong as its a proper erotic poem and not simply filled with dirty lines, that in my lines is not proper erotica poetry but then again that is only my opinion
i do not mind reading an erotic poem aslong as its a proper erotic poem and not simply filled with dirty lines, that in my lines is not proper erotica poetry but then again that is only my opinion
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Re: Re. playful lust
17th Nov 2018 2:00pm
many thousands read you , do they .. ok, well i will take a look at one of yours .. and tell you what i think .
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Re: Re. playful lust
17th Nov 2018 2:41pm
Re. playful lust
17th Nov 2018 2:45pm
thanks delete me kindly
sorry for wasting your time
many have rld mine
ask flower gal
don't read erotica
non ones are far better
may be to your taste
if not
block me
thanks lady poetry
sorry for wasting your time
many have rld mine
ask flower gal
don't read erotica
non ones are far better
may be to your taste
if not
block me
thanks lady poetry
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