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c.rush me
i am an eggshell at sea
you're not done breaking me
(yet)
saltchalkdust
magician's plume
o to have that flourish
ur trembling precision
floats like a chiffon scarf
(in a black&white film)
(with a crescendo
in ur earholes)
building up as u know how a crescendo
as it goes
how it goes
. i remember nothing
you're not done breaking me
(yet)
saltchalkdust
magician's plume
o to have that flourish
ur trembling precision
floats like a chiffon scarf
(in a black&white film)
(with a crescendo
in ur earholes)
building up as u know how a crescendo
as it goes
how it goes
. i remember nothing
Published 6th Mar 2018
Author's Note
sailors superstition: an eggshell on board must be broken into tiny pieces to prevent witches
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Anonymous
7th Mar 2018 00:25am
there is such
a magisterial`ism
when I read your poetry;
voice is often fragmented ...
you inspire me
and so does this piece
Fuck yes. You underestimate yourself when you don't try too hard and just let it flow~
https://youtu.be/Z2O94736GoM
https://youtu.be/Z2O94736GoM
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10th Mar 2018 6:55am
feeling the rush in all its roaring 'smoothness'..there is such an irony . inexplicable. like love .like life. N still ur words rapturously capture in a booming nothingness..magical. love the effectual zooms n zeros u paint in here, such easy?! grin, missed ur reads for quite long. shine on xx
13th Mar 2018 1:44am
There is such a rare alchemy to this write. Greatly enjoyed pondering it.
13th Mar 2018 9:48am
not quite "gettin" it ya know. but there's something being said in an aesthetic way that I really like. reminds me of someone shooting substances and managing to express it without any positive/negative BS. straight out the camera
4th Apr 2018 2:37pm
This is punchy as, glad I read your ML questions as it led me here. Delicious. Thanking you.
25th Apr 2018 8:30am
a crescendo building then floating down and away between the "how it goes" and remembering nothing. The air between lines emphasises a floaty feel... i'm not even entirely convinced you could have planned this to have conveyed quite the feeling it did, but if you did, that's a fine artistry - way well did
25th Apr 2018 12:32pm
